"Admonition" - Dead End Films

Wraith

Wraith

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Wraith said:
This is our first entry in a dvxuser fest and I'm going to go out on a limb and promise that we will win at least one of the top three places. Frankly, after seeing the quality of films that Rogan has made, well, let's just say we are very encouraged.
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WOW! People are really stepping up the talk around here! Good luck.
 
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This is our first entry in a dvxuser fest and I'm going to go out on a limb and promise that we will win at least one of the top three places.



Oh...it's done been broughten!
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Mark Johnson said:
Wow, I'm blushing. Thanks for the appreciation, but have you seen Matt Sconce? If I am the DUDE...he is the UBEREST!
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hehe Thanks Mark! You shouldn't have ...really:engel017:......sorry, back to Admonition. When did you guys start production and how long did it take to make?
 
"Admonition" was written sometime in April and was filmed over two consecutive weekends in May. Post production went pretty smooth (bought a new iMac for it!) and the music was a lot of fun to write for it, even though we didn't use most of it since it's a 5 minute film.
We're just a small group of guys from New York getting started into the film scene really. We've been filming silly things now and then since 2003 but this is really the first time we've taken something to the next level. It really was a huge learning curve for us since most of the stuff we did in the past was off the wall, ridiculous comedy (You can check out our website to see what I mean - http://www.deadendfilms.net) So shooting a serious drama was a little difficult for us I think. We used the DVX-100B with a shotgun mic. The audio was the biggest drawback I think in the production - although the lighting wasn't exactly great either. Like I said, big learning experience.
As for the story you'll just have to wait and see! Maybe I'll post some screenshots later this week. Thank you all so much for the good wishes, I really look forward to hearing criticisms of the film - good and bad.
 
Wraith said:
"Admonition" was written sometime in April and was filmed over two consecutive weekends in May. Post production went pretty smooth (bought a new iMac for it!) and the music was a lot of fun to write for it, even though we didn't use most of it since it's a 5 minute film.
We're just a small group of guys from New York getting started into the film scene really. We've been filming silly things now and then since 2003 but this is really the first time we've taken something to the next level. It really was a huge learning curve for us since most of the stuff we did in the past was off the wall, ridiculous comedy (You can check out our website to see what I mean - http://www.deadendfilms.net) So shooting a serious drama was a little difficult for us I think. We used the DVX-100B with a shotgun mic. The audio was the biggest drawback I think in the production - although the lighting wasn't exactly great either. Like I said, big learning experience.
As for the story you'll just have to wait and see! Maybe I'll post some screenshots later this week. Thank you all so much for the good wishes, I really look forward to hearing criticisms of the film - good and bad.
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sounds great! Look forward to seeing what you guy came up with!:2vrolijk_08:
 
Cool short.

Pretty simple idea executed well. It leaves me wanting to see what happens the following morning, so that's a good thing I suppose.

Compression hurt it some, but I got used to it after a while.
 
And rolling...and reviewing...

First note: Compression killed it. Hard to tell details. I would like to see a better compressed version to make a better review.

I think you cut off the end of a sentence at around :40...

Interesting idea in regards to time. I don't really understand how that is supposed to work. Maybe I just can't wrap my head around the idea. Mind you, that is only the technical end of the premise.

I love how all of these tech end of things tend to go terribly wrong. I didn't get the end so much. I think I might understand, no idea though.

Well done, like I said, compression was the big issue.
 
The compression - I know... I've never really had the experience of compressing my stuff down so low, and of course I procrastinated so after about 7 attempts of exporting, that was actually the best. The 100MB version looks a lot better..

The sentence at :40 - that was intentional. Mark is supposed to be interrupting Brian, but the shots didn't come out good enough to make it a smooth transition

The technical stuff - This is where my inexperience killed me. I wrote this as a short story first that (I feel) came out very well. It explained the idea behind the technology in a pretty well detailed, in-depth manner. However when I made the transition from short story to screenplay, it was almost all lost. Something I need to work on.

In regards to time - I don't think we utilized the whole "time theme" the way it was intended, and I actually worried a bit about whether it would be accepted, mainly because the clock on the computer screen really holds no relevance to the story (other than the time of day).


Thanks for the criticism - it really is appreciated, as this is our first "real" publicly viewed film.
 
First, the guitar didn't flow well but I'll let it slide. Your cuts were really distracting. For example, you have one character by himself and in almost the same frame you'd cut to both characters. At times, it seemed like two talking heads on screen just yapping, a wee bit too much exposition.

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However, I really enjoyed your story and love its potential. You can make Admonition part 2. The guy has until tomorrow morning to find out how he dies, will he die now that he knows? How does he stop it? Is if fate for him to die? etc.

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Now that I think about it you should've gone straight to the girlfriend/death phone call and show what happens in the next 12-18 hours.
 
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