The one shot at :56 looks too blown out to include I think. Just go back and ensure that its your best work - pacing and everything else seems good though. I agree with the audio track - there might be an issue there.
looks great, but the song I don't think fits the visuals. also the tag on the end is too noticeably video copilot, looks like you just downloaded a scene file and added text. not good if you're trying to advertise yourself. but again,it looks great and i liked the cut, just not the music.