I'm not that much in to 'talky-talk', especially for short films... But on the camera technical side, the lighting seemed to be a bit too much on the Jester, and occasionally too much on the King. Also the 'fill' lighting, perhaps from a bounce card, looked like it was coming from 'below' on both characters, and so gave it a less than 'real', or even a 'motivated' stylization. I think putting the bounce to fill on stands and getting it up in the air, more like the 'sky light' of the situation, would have been good. Also, it is pretty noticeable in the 'catch light' in both actor's eyes on occasion.
As a note on the over the shoulder shots... on one occasion the shot is over the King's shoulder, towards the Jester. The King raises his hand, and blocks the Jester. I would have 'edited' that motion out and switched to the other angle before the blocking of the hand.
