Joystick Films Presents.......Hangman

Zak Forsman said:
watched it. awesome. thought it could have been paced a little faster but that's a nitpick. ignore it. my favorite line was "***** you trippin, but i feel you though". that was a great little moment.
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Thanks Zak! And There is a lot to nitpick with this film.:beer: We shot it so quick and I will never ever try to shoot handheld with out a follow focus and no shoulder mount.
 
Well, solid amount of "french language" but that´s allright in my book for a film like that.

Personaly I don´t like handheld - even if it is motivated - but that´s just a personal fetish.
The framing could have bin a bit tighter and on a longer lens sometimes, but if you go handheld without shouldermount in a appartment I understand the problems.

Otherwise I really enjoyed this one Rodney - great job and nice twist at the end.

Frank
 
Thanks for checking it out. I totally agree with the framing. I am at work and it is KILLING me that I can't watch anything for another 4 hours!
 
To tense your nerves a bit further - I already watched 4 out of 6 zip containers of Loss Fest - and there are some real gems in there.

Have a nice day at work :evil: hehehe!

Frank
 
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Best plot so far! And I KNEW the ending man, it was sick. Awesome writting, loved the ladies. It was like the more "effeminate" pulp fiction with all the same attitude.

I'll mirror what the other guys said, framing. The location was kinda bleh, but at the same time it works in it's simplicity. It's not trying to wow you like that, but just tell a story. I liked the pacing too. It took it's time and every other line turns into a plot point.

Ultimately... awesome
 
Thanks for the comments! I really appreciate them. I was going for a kind of pulp thing. I really don't know if I achieved that as far a writing though.

I was not totally happy with this one in terms of audio and focus, But I decided to enter it anyway just to get some input on what I did right and what I did wrong.

I get off in 15 minutes and 23 seconds and I can't wait to get home and start watching some movies.
 
I bet this was a fun one to shoot! I liked the characters you created. Nice payoff at the end. Not bad for a quick short!
 
I thought this was fun.

I especially liked the opening sequence. It had a great energy and pace to it.

You characters and dialogue were cool, as someone else mentioned, it reminded me of QT's style.

I didn't see the end coming until we got there and I thought it was a clever twist.
 
some very cool work. i really dug your three leads. they worked great when onscreen together. though, to nitpick, i woulda liked a more meaty gun shot effect.
 
Man, nice work! I really liked this one. I liked the story and I think the girls did a wonderful acting job. This was very professional and I'm impressed with it. The only thing I think you can improve would be the sound fx, the gunshots and the phone dropping. If you ever need any sound fx let me know, because I have a full library. The other small little minor thing that I noticed was that the blood on the sheet looked a little pink and maybe there wasn't enough of it. I really liked how you pulled everything off without really having to actually show it, like the gunshots.
 
It was a good short, some definite chemistry with your leads, really liked the "**** my bad" exchange but pacing in the middle seemed... off.
 
Marlon Ladd said:
Man, nice work! I really liked this one. I liked the story and I think the girls did a wonderful acting job. This was very professional and I'm impressed with it. The only thing I think you can improve would be the sound fx, the gunshots and the phone dropping. If you ever need any sound fx let me know, because I have a full library. The other small little minor thing that I noticed was that the blood on the sheet looked a little pink and maybe there wasn't enough of it. I really liked how you pulled everything off without really having to actually show it, like the gunshots.
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Thanks for the comments. ANd my SFX library does indeed suck.:( I am glad you liked it. Your film was very cool. There was no thread for it though.
 
Chris Messineo said:
I thought this was fun.

I especially liked the opening sequence. It had a great energy and pace to it.

You characters and dialogue were cool, as someone else mentioned, it reminded me of QT's style.

I didn't see the end coming until we got there and I thought it was a clever twist.
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Thanks chris. I'm glad you checked it out.
 
I loved this. The opening sequence was really great, cutting that together between the title cards is perfect. I love that it managed to be funny surrounding such an awkward and dark situation. The gal with the slightly fairer skin, Jace I believe, sexy hair. I know that's random, but hey, sexy hair never hurts a movie. (she needs new headshots, the one on the fist post doesn't do her justice) Anyway, back on topic. There were a couple things you can improve on, just technical execution, but it was a really fun and entertaining short, and the twist at the end I didn't see coming, the END END, I saw as soon as she picked up her phone, but the real twist I had no idea. Nice job. Go ComedyFest.
 
It's interesting the way you sort of bring up the idea of gender bending and LGBT in this piece (although in a way that sociologists would have a field day with). It added humor to the already funny situation.

The dialogue was delivered fairly well by your leading women. They were really fun to watch and the scene when they're down in the living room (after the first event) was really a delight to watch most of the time. There were a few moments when character seemed to be broken, but it wasn't too distracting.

The sound was very solid all the way through and the music was a nice accent. I actually feel like I enjoyed this one more than The Puppeteer. You've got a solid sense of comedic timing and direction of scenes. The gun shot should have been louder. It would have been ringing in such a room as that.

The only other thing I could comment on was the sudden shift from darkly humorous to a melodramatic edge. It felt like too much of a throw the other way to me. I feel like you could have made a very tensely dramatic and intense film by the way it ended, or made a film made entirely of dark comedy. it didn't seem to hit a balance.

Fun viewing though. Great effort! :beer:
 
Thank you for the feedback. It just makes me realize that I need to look deeper into my own films and really decide how I want the audience to feel.

And SEXY never hurts a movie. check Jace out on facebook. You would like her pics.

"GO comedyfest" LMAO.
 
The actors were wonderful. All seemed to play off of one another nicely and be really really natural on screen. I don't know how much directing you did, or if they just got there and played off one another, but the end result was really nice.

I felt like I wanted something more out of the story though. Like you start with a really pregnant situation. So I would love to see you use something like that to explore more options for it. Right now, it plays a little like a Tarantino rip-off. But the world is full of those. So why not next time look at the premise and see where ELSE it can go. I mean, this situation can take you into soooo much fun, dark comedy. Which you seem to have an eye for.

You def have the chops and the talent on your team. Now just keep pushing yourself to get better, explore more, dig deeper.

Good work!!!!
 
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