"Trapped" - by One23 Films

Nice stuff Clarkage. Looking forward to what happens with the green screen. You got some great BTS going on. Good luck!
 
If I was that kid, I would'a tried driving!

I am quite partial to "last man on earth" type stories. Great ending.

:beer:
 
I love kids stories, but I tell you what. This one threw me for a loop! Great ending! This was a really good piece. I noticed there was some hissing in the narrative audio in the beginning, but other than that it was very good and I thought the kid did an excellent job of acting. Just can't say enough about that shot at the end.
 
Great job Clarkage! ...and you're only 15 years old? I'd say you have a very bright future in film ahead of you! That said, it seemed to me that the audio in this one needed work, levels, noise, etc. I also didn't feel the score fit the action. Great story idea & you really pulled it off. Congratulations!
 
What happened with the compression? I think you could have tried a couple more times to get a higher quality file.

I enjoyed the lighting, nice flesh tones, the indoor shots weren't badly done either. I did have a serious problem with the music, it was so poor and intrusive I couldn't focus on what was going on, I think less is more with ambient music.

Good story overall, I felt bad for the little kid, didn't see the ending coming.
 
Nice, Clarkage. You really got the Twilight theme going with this film. My only advice is to be very mindful of the audio as it is so very critical. I didn't catch some of the dialogue. It was a very good film overall. You're well on your way!
 
First off, thank you for all the comments it is really appreciated. As i have said before the whole thing is an amazing learning experience and just what i love to hear is more things i can work on for next time!! =)

I have to agree with all of you on the audio. It really disappointed me... And as for the music I went back and watched it again and i can see what you are all talking about it definitely had some awkward moments. I think that Justin Durban is willing to score our next one that we do because i have used his stuff in every film but I have problems when it comes to throwing the music down. Also I think next time around we will be monitoring our audio levels like hawks because it can just KILL any project you are working on. Thank you for all the feedback guys! Did anyone see anything else they thought didn't fit, etc.? I prefer brutal honesty over light happy little comments that don't help.
 
Man you guys rock. I wish I had started at your ages. I loved this one very well done guys. The end actually caught me off guard for once I was expecting something completely different to happen but it made another scene make so much more sense. Great job once again.
Pauly
 
Nice work. If I might be allowed to nitpick, one thing I would point out is that the camera shake seems to come in a bit late and isn't totally consistent through the quake. Great ending, looking forward to your next work.
 
Nice job guys, the only thing I had a problem with was the volume on your young boy's voice. I could barely make it out. Also I would have liked to have seen him walking down a deserted street, I wasn't quite sure what was going on. It would have been nice to have set the scene/story a bit more. But hey, that's just me. Best of luck on your next project!

cheers,

JP
 
This was fun and the ending surprised me a little.
There were some pretty smooth shots pulled off in this. Good camera work.
Work on the audio and you will come across much stronger.

Nice job overall.

Mike
 
Very good, you're lucky to have actor like him by your side. One-man films mostly depends about the performance of that one.

Zack did a great job, though at some times he walks strangely a little bit, like he's limbing. I didn't like the lighting outdoors-it looks overexposed to me, I think you just needed to lower your brightness in post-production(if you were able to), but I guess you're aware of that either.

Another thing-he's all alone there and he shouts if there's anyone out there. Now, if you couldn't get the empty street while he's walking, you could just shoot some details, roofs, windows, doors, cars, the sky...much of those shots would be like his point of view, that meaning, you don't need some great total shot etc to show that he's all alone. And of course, while editing it's much easier to put together ''Zack looking into sky---sky---Zack continues to walk'' then ''Zack---Zack---Zack''. It's better while editing, it looks better, and it doesn't cost you a lot or anything by that matter. : )

Audio could turn out better, but as I said-this is one-man film(hard and mostly unthankful), and dude, you're 15 years old! This film is much better than some on the fest by my opinion, and that just means that you should keep it coming, work more etc. If you continue, by the time of my age you should be one serious filmmaker.

Keep it up.
 
Definetely captured the Twilight Zone theme. Actor did a great job. Nice dolly moves! My only critique would be that the effects could have been a little better. But that's nitpicking. Good job! Look forward to your next film.
 
Very nice story and fantastic score. I loved the moment when the snow fell down. It gave me the sensation of fairy tale and I wished to could go back in my childhood time. Very enjoyable film - compliments! :)

Susanne
 
very ambitious short! i will echo an above poster to say that maybe add in a POV from the boy. love the ending, good twist! the boy did a great job too, keep filming!!!
 
dragged out a bit it seemed, but what a clever story. reminded me of the TZ where the dolls were in the barrel. audio mix of the dialog a bit weak in places (ambient noise, etc., like the mic placement was off, background noise).
 
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