Thanks so much! That's a huge compliment. :shocked:
Hi Mike,
I thought this was a great piece of work and, as a fan of "The Music Box", I think you are creating a style that is recognizably your own. Script, cinematography and acting all came together well - I have nothing major to say, but I'll try to do a little nitpicking.
A fan!? Sweet!Go ahead and pick away.
Near the beginning, when the watchman is in the bathroom, you show him running his finger down his time schedule (twice). I know you needed to do this to setup the character and your story, but I think he would have known his schedule so well he wouldn't have needed to refer to the type-written sheet.
He's obsessive about it, so he's always checking it and ensuring that he is on time. That and the second shot is more for the audience who may be paying attention. It lists the time that he will be watching the neighbours.
Not sure why you drew our attention to the guy starting up his lawnmower. It seemed a bit of a red herring to me.
Well, The Director's Cut shows him watching a few of the neighbours, I had to cut them for the six minute edit. I just wanted to show that he's watching people.
I thought the sound of the trash bin being dragged down the asphalt started too early. The watchman was still some way from reaching it and I wondered what the noise was.
I started it early. I think that it helps transition the next scene, just a personal choice I guess. I figured that it was too harsh an edit without it.
The interaction/dialogue between him and his victim was very good. It was entirely convincing and I liked the fact that it left us feeling more empathy for him than for her.
Thanks! I'm glad that it made you feel that way.
The sound of his watch alarm going off when she is in the bathroom was excellent. Just the little touch that good suspense is made of.
Thanks again. I wanted to activate her concern. I figured the beep and a small floor creak was the way to go.
Once again, a great film. Thanks.
Jason
Thanks CP! I appreciate that.
I especially liked the comment about you wanting to move the camera. I was hoping someone would feel that way during the hallway scene.
I have to say that I really enjoyed the theme this fest.
Cheers!
Mike
Thanks!
Friggin fantastic!! I need every vote that I can get. :dankk2:Dude, NICELY DONE! Very impressed. Didn't you make "Joel" as well? I remember the actor from that one I think.
I thought the lead did a FANTASTIC job. Extremely believable, and fun role for him. This film was really extremely simple in some aspects, but just laid everything out so well, with good pacing, wonderful music (I wondered if it was Justin I heard at the beginning, and was glad to see it WAS him that scored it), sound, editing, FX, etc. All very well done.
Great job. Gave it a 10 rating, in my book. It just worked for me that well.
That would be me!
