"Simon Van Winkle" by Robert Werden (Time Fest)

Going a little out of order here, but I just say it, so I am really curious to see how this came out. And I know Mike, only teasing. :grin:

And rolling and reviewing...

Really really soft image at first look. This is with a Redrock? Interesting. Dialog was definitely ADR I assume. It sounded really distant from the actors. And the rack focus in the beginning seemed to be off a little. Actually that happened a few times. I take it you aren't using ... HAHA! 1:35 good line...totally sounds like a teenager type deal.

Anyways, I take it you aren't using an AC. Since the focus pulls seem to be just a little off. You light also want to watch the framing of the girls. There was some...unintended cleavage I think. And (3:16) makes the framing make much more sense. Just a little heads up. I would also really make sure to measure between focus plane and subject. Since focus did seem really soft throughout. The adapter is nice, but can also mess things up pretty decently.

I would also try to work on dialog a little bit more recording wise, like I said, it seemed distant. Also, high lights seemed to get blown out.

But over-all, nice film.
 
Mattykins said:
Going a little out of order here, but I just say it, so I am really curious to see how this came out. And I know Mike, only teasing. :grin:

And rolling and reviewing...

Really really soft image at first look. This is with a Redrock? Interesting. Dialog was definitely ADR I assume. It sounded really distant from the actors. And the rack focus in the beginning seemed to be off a little. Actually that happened a few times. I take it you aren't using ... HAHA! 1:35 good line...totally sounds like a teenager type deal.

Anyways, I take it you aren't using an AC. Since the focus pulls seem to be just a little off. You light also want to watch the framing of the girls. There was some...unintended cleavage I think. And (3:16) makes the framing make much more sense. Just a little heads up. I would also really make sure to measure between focus plane and subject. Since focus did seem really soft throughout. The adapter is nice, but can also mess things up pretty decently.

I would also try to work on dialog a little bit more recording wise, like I said, it seemed distant. Also, high lights seemed to get blown out.

But over-all, nice film.
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The whole film was shot in 4 days. I was the only crew for everything, and my actors were just my daughters friends. Being my first film I really was overwhelmed trying to remember everything I had read. Not having a expert near by I kinda winged it. The whole experience was a good learning one, and hopefully next time i'll have learned more and maybe have some help.

The biggest problem we faced was the light. We only had sun light to deal with since I have no lights at all. So as the hours ticked on we ended up scrapping shots and waiting till the next day.

Framing was hard because of the room we shot in. I had 5 feet from the talent if I wanted them in the sun light coming through the window. We had intended on shooting the whole thing in the garage and out side, but the kids complained about the heat, and so did I.

I had just gotten the M2 a week before the shoot so I was basically learning on the fly. I understand 10 times more now than 10 days ago with it. My biggest mistake was not getting enough lenses. I only got a 50mm and I should have gotten a 28 as well.

The most important thing is we had fun and the kids want to do more movies. So I think in all it was a great experience and a small step into the industry.
 
I hear you there. Its great you got it done. I enjoyed the story.

And that is what these fests are for you know? Have fun most importantly. And learn a thing or two in the process. My film didn't come out as I intended...but we had fun. My brother (was grumpy) and his friends had a blast. It's great shooting something and having people on set have a good time. And no worries with the shoot. I call it as I see it while watching. Just some things to keep an eye on. :)

Interested to see what you come up with next. And at least you know how to use that adapter now right? Learning experience and fun experience, that's all that matters here.

-Matt
 
OOh, your daughter wasn't the boob girl was she?

Kinda weird.

I don't want you to beat me up over objectifying your daughters chest.
 
conrad_johnson said:
OOh, your daughter wasn't the boob girl was she?

Kinda weird.

I don't want you to beat me up over objectifying your daughters chest.
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UH no, my daughter was the one in the red shirt.
We wanted Janson to show the bra, so it would be remembered at the end of the film. That is why there was so many boob shots. Janson was great about it, she really took one for the team, embarrassing as it was for her.

The funny part was out at the last shot we had actually shot the final scene the day before, but when we got on location we realized the tree had huge roots sticking up and the shots would not match. So Janson took off her bra in public to make the shot complete.
 
Good film...good story. Audio was out of sync here & there for me. And for me (having daughters) I think you could have used something else beside sex as the motivation.

Nice job.
 
ZazaCast said:
Good film...good story. Audio was out of sync here & there for me. And for me (having daughters) I think you could have used something else beside sex as the motivation.

Nice job.
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I wish I had fixed the audio. I noticed that after I had uploaded. Even after uploading I tried to fix it, and it was a sony vegas glitch that I just could not figure out.

I was hesitant about using sexual references, however the fact remains that teen agers tend to be thinking about that all the time and as a motivation goes, it is a pretty strong one at that age.
 
Not bad for your first time out. I kinda thought the story was cool...What teenage boy wouldn't do just about anything to see a girls boob. Funny and well thought out.
 
When editing try to be a little faster on your cuts for dialog's sake. When people are talking in real life there isn't a few second pause between replies. You can fix this by either cutting faster or by starting the dialog early and having it overlap some. Experiment with it, but I think this one little fix would make the film come across as a lot more polished.

Good luck in future projects.
 
krestofre said:
When editing try to be a little faster on your cuts for dialog's sake. When people are talking in real life there isn't a few second pause between replies. You can fix this by either cutting faster or by starting the dialog early and having it overlap some. Experiment with it, but I think this one little fix would make the film come across as a lot more polished.

Good luck in future projects.
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Yes, that is a very good point. I'm noticing the major flaws in my film are centered around editing. I need to allow more time for that on future films.
 
For your first time out and a one man crew, I'm impressed.

I couldn't help thinking, there's no way he could just stand there for 1000 years...where were his parents? But that's just too damned logical where it's not called for.

I love that fact that you have the geeky teenage boy inventing a time machine to get girls. Wouldn't it have been easier for him to start a band? :grin:

This really was a cute story and I'm betting that we're going to be seeing some great things from you in the future.

Criticisms: You really need to do some lighting for the interior shots. You ADR was a bit hollow, take a little more time on it and do it in a location where you can control what you're getting. (It's a major plus that you even thought of doing ADR on your first piece...:thumbsup:)

Thanks for sharing. :beer:
 
Blaine said:
For your first time out and a one man crew, I'm impressed.

I couldn't help thinking, there's no way he could just stand there for 1000 years...where were his parents? But that's just too damned logical where it's not called for.

I love that fact that you have the geeky teenage boy inventing a time machine to get girls. Wouldn't it have been easier for him to start a band? :grin:

This really was a cute story and I'm betting that we're going to be seeing some great things from you in the future.

Criticisms: You really need to do some lighting for the interior shots. You ADR was a bit hollow, take a little more time on it and do it in a location where you can control what you're getting. (It's a major plus that you even thought of doing ADR on your first piece...:thumbsup:)

Thanks for sharing. :beer:
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We are already getting ready for our next film. I'm learning so much from you guys and ladies already. I'm really glad everyone liked the story. The technical can be improved, but if the story does not capture your imagination then all the technical can not compensate.

I've got a feature length story i'm wanting to film, so all these shorts and interacting with you guys are getting me ready for that day.
 
Hey, the production values were terrible and yet I still liked it! I mean that's a good thing man, because as you say you are already working on improving your techniques, and I'd rather watch a film with interesting ideas and a fresh take on things than watch something really slick but unoriginal. You had a really neat take on your story, with a very teen point of view, and I did want to know how things were going to turn out. I loved your ending. I really look forward to seeing your next film when you start bringing your talent together with some solid technical skills!
 
sean90291 said:
Hey, the production values were terrible and yet I still liked it! I mean that's a good thing man, because as you say you are already working on improving your techniques, and I'd rather watch a film with interesting ideas and a fresh take on things than watch something really slick but unoriginal. You had a really neat take on your story, with a very teen point of view, and I did want to know how things were going to turn out. I loved your ending. I really look forward to seeing your next film when you start bringing your talent together with some solid technical skills!
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Thanks, that was very encouraging.
 
Interesting story. Sometimes the acting did not work for me and other times I thought it was endeaing. It definitely had a teen perspective. Boobs are worth risking my life for...wait, maybe that is not just a teen perspective.:cheesy: I thought the character at the end needed to be covered in cobwebs or something to make us feel he had been there a long time. Look forward to the next one.
 
Just watched the film and thought it was entertaining. Good effect on him freezing with the clouds speeding up.

Just a few thoughts from a scientific and cultural point of view: If a guy was frozen out in public like that and couldn't be touched or moved due to some sort of time bubble effect, wouldn't those left moving build something akin to a roof to protect him and place signs around him? :cheesy: He would be a serious tourist attraction.:happy:

Also the letter and its container could have been aged to match the amount of time they sat by him... Nearly 920 years after the girls died. A metal box, rusted and aged would have fit the shot better.
Still, you did very well! Thanks for the hard work. :Drogar-Happy(DBG):
 
msconce said:
Interesting story. Sometimes the acting did not work for me and other times I thought it was endeaing. It definitely had a teen perspective. Boobs are worth risking my life for...wait, maybe that is not just a teen perspective.:cheesy: I thought the character at the end needed to be covered in cobwebs or something to make us feel he had been there a long time. Look forward to the next one.
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The original script called for a visible bubble around him, and a montage of time passing. I'm sure if I had done it there would have been a better feel to the shot.
 
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