Killer Time a film by Alain

I thought the boss did a good job of being over the top. I liked the attitude of the characters. This short got a chuckle out of me. Although, I was hoping for a little more scarface and amping up the violence but it's just an opinion.
 
Mobie540 said:
I thought the boss did a good job of being over the top. I liked the attitude of the characters. This short got a chuckle out of me. Although, I was hoping for a little more scarface and amping up the violence but it's just an opinion.
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I'm glad you like it. Thanks
 
It all felt very "El Mariachi"-ish to me. Acting, storyline, camerawork, even costumes (the main guy, I forget his, name, with the vest).
 
dopeyname101 said:
It all felt very "El Mariachi"-ish to me. Acting, storyline, camerawork, even costumes (the main guy, I forget his, name, with the vest).
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Thanks you for viewing the short and making comments on it. I did not make this short based or inspired on the mariachi movie or movies nor I try to copy any storyline or style , this is all my vision and I projected it the way I saw it in my mind.
Thanks.
 
Nicely done. I agree with some of the above comments, but really...good job!
I picked up a bit of wind noise on the inside the mailbox shot and the compression looked funky to me. Liked the music.

Enjoyed this one!
 
ZazaCast said:
Nicely done. I agree with some of the above comments, but really...good job!
I picked up a bit of wind noise on the inside the mailbox shot and the compression looked funky to me. Liked the music.

Enjoyed this one!
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I was using the on cam mic for the mailbox shot. Thanks for viewing and commenting on my short.
 
this was a great effort, i agree with the above poster's comment in that i was hoping for the violence to be amped up a notch based on the title. it all seemed dumbed down a bit, like when the boss said something like "don't give me that crap!" or something like that. i laughed out loud on that part literally. a harsh curse word woulda probably been more appropriate given this man is highly pissed and and worried about a snitch testifying against him the next day and possibly going away to prison.

the acting seemed very stiff from the boss' underlink, the black dude. it seemed as if he was forced to stick to the script with no wiggle room to adlib or say the lines the way he wanted to. when he was shot, it wasnt too believeable, he fell like he didnt want to hurt himself or get his clothes dirty.

the boss was fine, over the top added a little character to the film.

your main hitman felt like he needed to loosen up although again it felt more like he was confined to the script word for word.

all in all it was entertaining and i watched the whole thing. i'm sure you will get some love in some of the festivals for shorts. good luck.
 
Mickey Munday said:
this was a great effort, i agree with the above poster's comment in that i was hoping for the violence to be amped up a notch based on the title. it all seemed dumbed down a bit, like when the boss said something like "don't give me that crap!" or something like that. i laughed out loud on that part literally. a harsh curse word woulda probably been more appropriate given this man is highly pissed and and worried about a snitch testifying against him the next day and possibly going away to prison.

the acting seemed very stiff from the boss' underlink, the black dude. it seemed as if he was forced to stick to the script with no wiggle room to adlib or say the lines the way he wanted to. when he was shot, it wasnt too believeable, he fell like he didnt want to hurt himself or get his clothes dirty.

the boss was fine, over the top added a little character to the film.

your main hitman felt like he needed to loosen up although again it felt more like he was confined to the script word for word.

all in all it was entertaining and i watched the whole thing. i'm sure you will get some love in some of the festivals for shorts. good luck.
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I agree with your comment of he look like he didn't want to get his clothes dirty, I did not like the way he fell but I could not re-shot the scene, this short was shoot in 11hrs I did not have too much time to shoot it the way I want it to because of time and planning, but I'm really proud the way it came out due to the short time and circunstances. This is my first short ever and I'm planning to continuing making more. This was for me a great experience and I really enjoyed making it. I hope that I have more time for the next fest and I get beter with time.
Thanks I really appreciated your comments and critiques.
 
Great first effort. I did think maybe the use of profanity was warranted in this case it would have made the story more real for me. The boss was a little odd and I wanted him to be more of a bad ass. Good work keep it up we all learn each film we make and they just keep getting better and better.
 
pauly_the_hitman said:
Great first effort. I did think maybe the use of profanity was warranted in this case it would have made the story more real for me. The boss was a little odd and I wanted him to be more of a bad ass. Good work keep it up we all learn each film we make and they just keep getting better and better.
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I did not used profanity because I thought It wasn't allowed, Now I know for the next fest, thanks.
 
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Whoa! El mariachi combined with miami vice. yowza! the flick didn't tickle my facny, but i did have fun watching it. i liked your casting. keep it up!
 
miamivideo said:
I agree with your comment of he look like he didn't want to get his clothes dirty, I did not like the way he fell but I could not re-shot the scene, this short was shoot in 11hrs I did not have too much time to shoot it the way I want it to because of time and planning, but I'm really proud the way it came out due to the short time and circunstances. This is my first short ever and I'm planning to continuing making more. This was for me a great experience and I really enjoyed making it. I hope that I have more time for the next fest and I get beter with time.
Thanks I really appreciated your comments and critiques.
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you will get better. you already handle critiscm and personal opinions like a professional. take what you find useful from it and ignore the rest. you're in good shape if this was your first short. there's a lot of first shorts that are 20 times worse that i've seen online. this was entertaining and i made it all the way through to the end. i normally lose interest quick and just delete the file without even commenting on it if i dont like it.

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Keep at it! This was actually pretty entertaining in spots.
Editing needs some fine tuning but the acting was decent.

Framing wasn't bad either.

Hope to see you in the next fest.

Mike
 
Thanks everyone for you comments I'm glad you like the story. I promise for next fest it will be better.
 
You took on a lot with your crime boss story, kudos for that. I loved the Boss the best. The shots in the scene with the punching bag were great. I felt those were the most "Cinematic". Probably because there were great shadows throughout the scene. Good work. I look forward to what you come up with next time!
 
AmyO said:
You took on a lot with your crime boss story, kudos for that. I loved the Boss the best. The shots in the scene with the punching bag were great. I felt those were the most "Cinematic". Probably because there were great shadows throughout the scene. Good work. I look forward to what you come up with next time!
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AmyO said:
You took on a lot with your crime boss story, kudos for that. I loved the Boss the best. The shots in the scene with the punching bag were great. I felt those were the most "Cinematic". Probably because there were great shadows throughout the scene. Good work. I look forward to what you come up with next time!
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The punching back scene was great! I look forward to your next movie. I would just study pacing and framing and rock the next fest to its core!
 
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