Killer Time a film by Alain

Your movie is very well executed. The story is solid. The acting is nice except for the killing part. It's somewhat not so convincing to me. But overall I think your movie is one of the top ones in this fest. Congrats!
 
totitefilms said:
Your movie is very well executed. The story is solid. The acting is nice except for the killing part. It's somewhat not so convincing to me. But overall I think your movie is one of the top ones in this fest. Congrats!
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I appreaciate your comment, thanks
 
I think Joe was pretty thorough in his critique so I won't go over all those issues. I think this might have been just a bit too ambitious to pull off for your first film given your resources. The acting was a bit rough, particularly the boss who only seemed to have one tone. The editing could definitely use some tightening, especially on the final shooting scene which was jarring in its discontinuity.

It would have been nice to use some fake blood to sell the killings, too.

Congrats on finishing this and I look forward to watching you grow as a filmmaker. :thumbsup:
 
Blaine said:
I think Joe was pretty thorough in his critique so I won't go over all those issues. I think this might have been just a bit too ambitious to pull off for your first film given your resources. The acting was a bit rough, particularly the boss who only seemed to have one tone. The editing could definitely use some tightening, especially on the final shooting scene which was jarring in its discontinuity.

It would have been nice to use some fake blood to sell the killings, too.

Congrats on finishing this and I look forward to watching you grow as a filmmaker. :thumbsup:
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Thanks
 
Right off the bad, the audio could have been so much better. It sets the tone as low budget. Smooth transitions from scene to scene with crossfades would help this problem instead of the sudden cuts into different scenes.

The actors are OK. They definitely have character in them. I’m not too much of a fan of the dissolves in the editing. I think those work best in montages or slow motion.

I can’t believe the music at 3:00. I felt like being in an episode of Miami vice. A custom score would take this to another level.

I had a hard time following the film. Perhaps faster editing and tighter shots would help. Weird jump cuts, crossing axis, Oh… and cross over belly shot was classic.

I’m not sure what else to say about this film. I think there’s so much more room for improvements.

Congrats on entering the fest.
 
One of the things I liked was you definately captured the Miami image. It felt like it was miami as much as Miami Vice and Burn Notice does. (I happen to study art direction from the art director of Miami Vice the series and the movie). So kudos.

The editing was pretty really distracting. Your opening sequence was quick cuts and rushed but that usually leads to a big bang of action. Instead we got credits and the story slowed down. Thats kind of dissappointing. So go back and re-evaluate the pacing of your cuts. Short takes with alot of cuts gets the audience excited. Longer takes makes us calm down.

Congrats on finishing your first film. Look forward to your next ones.
 
thank you all for your comments, I promise for the next fest a better executed short, I'm planning to have more time to make a better film, Thanks again.
 
general gangster short, pretty good, although I did notice that the cigar was never lit, and when the guy was talking on the phone it looked like he wasn't holding a phone at all ie he had his hand covering the whole mouthpiece, didn't like that.
sorry.
thank you.
 
iSTy said:
general gangster short, pretty good, although I did notice that the cigar was never lit, and when the guy was talking on the phone it looked like he wasn't holding a phone at all ie he had his hand covering the whole mouthpiece, didn't like that.
sorry.
thank you.
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