work in progress - 20 sec commersial, comments appreciated

gunleik

gunleik

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Hi

First raw scetch for (hopefully) a series of commersials.

The other "cards" are to be filled with other atletes as the shooting moves on

Had serious issues with sound - will get it further, though.

What I'm working on is a basic setup for the series.

Any critisism appreciated!

(OK, this is cheesy - but that's what they want. It's "hits for kids" -;)

http://www.vulture.no/avanti/IngridNila_beta_01.mov

Gunleik
 
The blond is falling off the side of the frame during the split screen. You may want to reposition them slightly so they're more centered.
 
You gotta love those norwegian "jenter" ;-)

Cheesy - yes, but nice work (though I agree with David that the blonde is framed a bit 'off').
 
Thanks!

Stupid things I don't see when I have my head all filled up!
(banging my head in the screen -;)!

Easy to fix though...

(Dragging my feet slowly back to Shake -;)

Keep'em coming

& thanks again

Gunleik
 
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You might want to lose the garage band sound bytes- "incredible" "amazing" etc- a bit
distracting from the girls audio. Well shot overall, except for framing others mentioned.
 
The framing did seem off to me as well. Nice piece. I know if it were done in the states they would be in those tiny little outfits. That would be my biggest thing. Why cover them up... Hot horweigen volleyball players what's not to like.


Like the transitions and I kind of like the snappy sound hits. Possibly have some additional video wipe or transition at the end. Like a ball into the lens or something.. of course behind lexan/plexiglass.
 
Thanks

This feedback is all really helpfull!


The ball in the end is a good idea. I could comp the logo onto the ball the girl uses and bounce the logo out to fill the screen.

BTW I am aware of the safezones. -;)

Some XP users have gotten a "bad atom" response on the movie. What is that?

anyway:
For XP use:
http://www.vulture.no/avanti/sk_beta01.wmv


Gunleik
 
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