very first short film

I just right-clicked / save in i.e., worked fine….

i liked the gunshot flash at the end. very cool effect. I also liked the creative shots such as the elevator.

as far as the sound goes....i would have shot it originally with a hypercardioid mic. even a cheap mic (think $150-200) on a 20ft xlr cord would have worked wonders. try tuning down the mids and bass in large /echoy rooms too. the overall volume balance seems really low too. i had to turn up my volume, which i am reluctant to do. was the shadowy characters voice a voiceover? was it processed? if so, try and increase the volume.
also theres ALOT of great info in the audio section.
 
some of it was voiceover b/c we had to cut some shots short.and the others we processed. but it was a great learning experience. thanks for the feedback i appreciate it
 
Kudos to you for making a flik. So many people talk about doing it and never do. I know this was a practice piece but I thought i'd post some feedback for future consideration on your next project.

I'd spend more time on the script. I knew very early on that he killed his own father and he was interviewing himself.

More coverage is needed. A lot of this was talking heads and that can become very static. If you have to have talking heads, find a way to make it interesting and dramatic to watch.

I think it didn't need to be this long. I know the shot of the parking garage was cool to look at, and the fortunate timing of your lead walking on the bridge just as an ambulance was crossing in the distance was great, but it didn't service the story at all and can just be cut out. In fact, when your suspect says "here's your precious truth", I'd fade into your guy entering the apartment.

If you wanted to use that bridge shot to service the story, I'd sooner put it at the end, implying after he shot his father, he wandered around aimlessly. The ambulance crossing on the other side could be seen as heading to his own apartment after the fact. If you had coverage on the characters face at the bridge with a shocked look, it would improve the impact of your narrative. Even if you have a shocked look of him in the interrogation room, you could reduce the opacity of it and float that over the shot you already have of him from behind on the bridge.

Once you're in post, you can play with your narrative in ways you didn't originally think of.

Hope this helps-
 
yeah its a ton of help, the short started out as practice with my camera and even more so with lighting and i decided to make somthing out of it. its not great but i feel i got alot out of the whole thing. i deff. plan on doing alot more work in preproduction next time. thank you for all your suggestions i will deff. consider them with my next peice.

-Miller-
 
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