SHORT: Tragedy of War - Shot outside Edinburgh

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johndun20

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Hello,

I have just spent the last few weeks exploring the old war sites up and and down the Forth of Firth outside Edinburgh. I made a short film called 'The Tragedy of War' which is hopefully an emotional reminder.

The Tragedy of War is a thought provoking film reminding us of the sacrifice made by millions during World War I + II. Filmed just outside Edinburgh along the Firth of Forth where many abandoned war time buildings remain. Pill boxes, Coastal artillery battery's, search lights, sea barriers and other fortifications guarded the bridges and the naval base at Rosyth. Many of the islands along the forth are fortified. During both World War I and World War II Inchmickery was used as a gun emplacement. The concrete buildings make the island look like a battleship.

Six weeks into World War II, the first air attack over Britain took place over the Forth. These were the first enemy aircraft of the war to be brought down over Britain.

http://www.vimeo.com/24477686

Any feedback would be appreciated.. especially if its critical!


Cheers,
John
 
Impressive work.

But the camera shake you used when a machine gun was firing..........I think that could be lost. It broke my concentration and just didn't seem to fit the message of "quiet reflection".

Can you get access to file footage of the battle or of the buildings? Adding those clips into your timeline would add some contrast between then and now, especially to replace the clip mentioned above.
 
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2171 posts Doc Bernard and i never bumped into you on a thread before - Wow! hehe hi!

Johndun - nice wee film there (and hey if your passing Fife - im there!) I think the film works almost like a pre-amble of sorts as a kind of memorial day advert for a documetnary (and thats if it were 90 secs, 2 mins etc) The 7 minute running time does grow a bit old because as amazing as the stories are (and with some very elegant cinematography.) It is a bit overlong! Test your mates on whether they would watch the film twice! (I bet they will if you cut a 2 min version!)

In anycase I reckoned it was a decent short and thanks for sharing bro welcome to the forum!
 
Doc Bernard said:
Impressive work.

But the camera shake you used when a machine gun was firing..........I think that could be lost. It broke my concentration and just didn't seem to fit the message of "quiet reflection".

Can you get access to file footage of the battle or of the buildings? Adding those clips into your timeline would add some contrast between then and now, especially to replace the clip mentioned above.
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Thanks for your feedback Doc. Yeah, i was unsure whether to use that shakey footage.. it seems some people like and dislike it!

Cheers
 
lawriejaffa said:
2171 posts Doc Bernard and i never bumped into you on a thread before - Wow! hehe hi!

Johndun - nice wee film there (and hey if your passing Fife - im there!) I think the film works almost like a pre-amble of sorts as a kind of memorial day advert for a documetnary (and thats if it were 90 secs, 2 mins etc) The 7 minute running time does grow a bit old because as amazing as the stories are (and with some very elegant cinematography.) It is a bit overlong! Test your mates on whether they would watch the film twice! (I bet they will if you cut a 2 min version!)

In anycase I reckoned it was a decent short and thanks for sharing bro welcome to the forum!
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Yes, I am considering cutting it down and perhaps firing it off the a few short films comps and see what happens. I'll struggle to decide what to cut!!!!

Cheers
 
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