sodotoguwangus
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Just for fun, here's a quick scene from my screenplay 6-sting which was a top ten finalist in the Creative Screenwriting contest recently. Top ten is pretty good, considering they had a turnout of nearly 4,000 entrys.
When reading this scene, keep in mind that the character Vince, is a real ladies man. Almost like a modern day Don Juan.
Here it is:
When reading this scene, keep in mind that the character Vince, is a real ladies man. Almost like a modern day Don Juan.
Here it is:
Code:
VINCE
pays for a drink at the bar. A girl with short cropped black
hair approaches and stands beside him. She looks just like a
go-go girl.
The BARTENDER hands GO GO GIRL a drink. She tosses a five on
the counter for him and turns to leave.
Vince catches her eye in passing.
She looks at him. Hesitates.
Vince doesn't miss a beat.
VINCE
That smell. What are you wearing?
GO GO GIRL
It's --
VINCE
Mmmmm...
(leaning in)
...that smells sooo good...
Vince brushes her hair aside. He sniffs slowly, moving up
from her shoulder to ear.
He speaks slowly and intimately.
VINCE
You know, people don't pay enough
attention to smell. But animals,
before they mate, will always smell
each other. Evolution has hard
wired us to respond to certain
things. For example, you are wired
to respond...when...
Vince leans in even closer, smelling her even more
erotically. She tilts her head back as Vince's lips glide
along her neck.
VINCE
...Ever notice how lions, when they
mate, bite and tug at the ends of
each other's mane? It's like when
someone pulls the back of your
hair.
Vince runs his hand up the back of her neck and grabs a
fistful of hair at the roots and pulls it gently downwards.
GO GO GIRL
Mmmmm....
VINCE
Not many people know, but the most
sensitive places on the body are
places that are usually hidden from
contact with the air, like the back
of your elbow...
(Vince demonstrates on her
using small, circular
motions)
There are millions of sensitive
nerve endings here that release
endorphins when properly
stimulated.
Vince takes her arm, bends it little, and erotically bites
the area on the opposite side of the elbow. She shivers,
wets her lips.
VINCE
But do you know what the best thing
in the world is?
(looks at her)
A...bite...right...here...
Vince points to the side of his neck.
VINCE
Bite me.
She does...
...and yes...finally...slowly...he may...if he wants...and if
she's ready..............kiss.
And they do.