SHORT: Time Goes By

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pauldu27

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Hi everyone,

Over the course of the past week, I created a short film for Campus Moviefest, which is a one week college film festival.
This was the first stage of the competition, and was held at Rowan University. I am currently a sophomore there.
We won best drama, and best directing. The project was shot on a RED One. I realize there are many things that are wrong with the film,
but the crew only consisted of myself and one other person. I would really appreciate any feedback anyone could offer. Here's the link.

http://www.campusmoviefest.com/movie...4-time-goes-by

Thank you for your time - Paul DuVilla
 
Hi-ya Paul,
I'll give you some feedback. I thought it good. The voice over sounds like a much younger person than the character shown. It needs the old man voice. The flashback show aged film for a couple seconds that disappears. Might consider a transition for the flashbacks. The rail station and coming home scenes are in color. Shouldn't these have been B&W? The tie should have been black or green, not a pattern. Love that station scene - good job siming the train movement. You are lucky to have such a location. Why didn't the soldier wear the hat in the station scene? Costumes and locations are great for a periord piece. When he is proposing, there is a modern car in the BG. :) Cinema wise you did great - love the footage. If I see one major flaw that kills the film - it's pacing. This should have been three not five minutes long. Cut & slice will greatly improve this film. Great job overall. --TimMc
 
Hi,
Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. The voice over was originally supposed to be the old man, but there were too many issues with the recordings so unfortunately we had to re-record it the night before the deadline. I agree with the coloring ideas, and in hindsight it would have looked better. As for the tie. When we put together the costumes during the week, we slipped up and missed on getting a tie, so we used one we found. The station, we actually just called and asked if we could use it, and the owners were more than happy to help. We were extremely thankful for that, and your right it is a great location. And thanks I'm glad the movement of the camera was fairly hidden. As for the car, I have no excuse for that one. My grip and I were a little overwhelmed with keeping everything on time (we were a two person crew managing six actors in one day:grin:), and we didn't even think to look at the street which sounds ridiculous ha. And lastly, I've gotten a lot better at pacing, but still have a long way to go, so i'll keep working at it. I'm very glad you enjoyed the film though, and thanks a million for the feedback!
Sincerely - Paul DuVilla
 
I know the feeling about herding cats. We shoot one short a month in my group. People are pains quite often - especially the artisitic types. On stuff, in the BGs, I am a pro photographer by trade (wannabe films) so I'm used to looking at the BG, FG, and composition. We've had camera ops, in our multiple cam shoots, film each other. Real pain to rotoscope. On pacing, you had the film in the can, you just have to edit and show only what the story demands, especially on a short. Would have cut you total edit time. We shot one back in Oct. Had to be no more than one minute for TV. Had to cut out cool stuff that took many hours to film. Very sad. But the final pacing was very good I think. Good luck with future projects and I look forward to watching more from you.
 
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