The Present

Loki

Loki

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I've wanted to post this for quite a while, but we've been doing the festival thing for the past year so I've had to hold off on posting online. But now that we're finished our run I'm happy to finally be able to share it here!

I've been a DVXUser for quite a while; cut my teeth on the original DVX camera and shot a bunch of films with it. I'm incredibly happy with how it all turned out and very proud of my cast and crew's great work.

We shot this in March 2014 on the Arri Alexa. Real purdy camera ;)

Anyways, if you have a few minutes give it a look. Feel free to comment about it; good... bad.. whatever I'm always up for hearing people's opinions on my work.

This was produced by another DVXUser, Kegan Sant. And written and directed by me.. Loki, AKA Hank Devos.

Enjoy.

 
Very nicely done, Hank (and Kegan)! I loved the feel of the piece, and while I felt the time-travel "reveal" may have been telegraphed a bit too much, I thought the story was well-told. Thanks for sharing!
 
Thanks Stephen! We're pretty proud of the run this did. As always, feedback is appreciated guys - we can only get better if we hear back from you folks!

KS.
 
Well done! :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
So is it The Present just as in a gift, or The Present as in "be in the present"? :happy:

My only issue is those annoyingly bright cylindrical lights in the cafe...

Congrats guys!
 
Looks really good, sounds really good. Agree that the ending is telegraphed pretty early. Could nix some of the background music, too.

This is what we hope DVXusers are doing out there . . . !
 
Looks good and like DJ said, sounds good - very, very important. I'm not going to comment about the story, because that's subjective, so who cares what I (or any one viewer) think, to each his/her own. I too am not super keen on the music - very generic and too much of it, let other sounds do some of the soundscape work. I'd ponder the concept of "generic" - how do I make my story not seem "generic" in telling techniques, in emotional flow, expected reactions. As a viewer I want to be surprised. For example, I expect someone to be sad when their loved one is dying, yes; what I'm hoping is to see a reaction, or telling that is different from the bog standard - but that still feels true - it can cut deeper that way, not seem like so much "well, this is expected". Tempo: mix it up a bit; here, it feels too monotonous - everything happens at the same pace, and one can only take so much of the languorous melancholy. Add 15% more energy to the whole thing. I felt like in a few places, you could've used more setups. Not always super happy about the framing. Wished for less cam shake in the 10:45 - 11 watch sequence - perfect place for more setups with very smooth hidden cuts. Overall, quite good technically.
 
I liked it! What was your shooting schedule like for this?

The only nit I had was the shirt on the guy in the background at the cafe. The red really leads your eye.
 
QuickHitRecord said:
I liked it! What was your shooting schedule like for this?

The only nit I had was the shirt on the guy in the background at the cafe. The red really leads your eye.
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One to those things I didn't think about on the day.. but then when I got into editing.. it's all I could see...

We shot over two very jam packed days. Originally I wanted a 3 day shoot to give myself more time but budget dictated our schedule.
 
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