The Devil's Handshake - TristanPR

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TristanPR

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Well, I hope everyone liked the film.

Any input, and or constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated. Thanks guys.
 
Hey it was cool, let's get together and between the two of us we'll make a kick-ass film. I'll start writing something.
 
I found the opening credits/sequence to hold a lot of promise, but overall felt the story & acting (of the lead actress specifically) to be very lacking.

Music was fine too. Never seen a zombie snap someone's neck before, as I think of that as a fairly technical (higher brain function) thing to do, when just previously that zombie was only concerned with trying to stuff its face with her flesh.

How does the title tie into the story?
 
Yeah the title really was off on this one. Some of the music was kind of obnoxious at times and I would agree with the neck breaking thing. That kind of thing should be left up to steven segal. :)
brian
 
I think the problem with this short was that it played like one segment of a larger project. Taken as such, it would have been a decent scene.

I feel, unfortunately, that it had no closure.
 
I still cannot view this. It takes me to QT update page for available third party codecs and I have yet to VOTE on it as well. Im not gonna guess and start DL'ing third party QT codecs....
 
Thanks for the comments guys. I will definitely agree that the title was off. It was a spur of the moment deal, and with nothing else on mind, I decided to use "Devil's Handshake". Don't ask why....

The reasoning for the decision of the neck-snapping was because I decided to intentionally make these undead creatures more literate, and aware. More brain matter if you may (no pun intended) :) ...

I appreciate the constructive criticism, as it will only allow me to learn. Thanks very much folks.
 
This one needed some serious work. Pretty much everything could have been improved on. Sorry if that sounds harsh, and believe me it's not the worst one by any means. There is some potential which is why I am "telling you how I really feel". Why did you show the newscast twice? The sound design was lacking, the acting was pretty bad. The gunshot actually surprised me a bit. Good job on that. Some of the shots looked composed well, just too many things lacking. Also, the zombie breaking the neck seems really fake. Good effort and I will bet your next will be a hell of alot better. Tim.
 
In a lot of ways I do agree with Tim in that there was a lot of room for improvement. I would start with the actors because they stood out like a sore thumb. The story took a bit to get moving and then was unspecial. Tighten the script and reshoot with better actors. Will look like night and day!!!

Nice work though!

Robert
 
Slimothy, I do not view your comment as harsh what-so-ever... It's all about learning, and being able to hone your skills to whichever craft you wish. I really appreciate all of the constructive criticism I've been getting, as it will only allow me to improve. I do see where I need to improve on this project for sure, and with more learning and experience, I won't make some of the mistakes I made on this short, in future projects.

I would love more constructive criticism if anyone wishes.

Best of luck to everyone, since the voting is coming to a close shortly.
 
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