Tdrp 2

Dustin R. Rogan

Dustin R. Rogan

Silent Bob's Evil Twin
This will never see the screen, I originally wrote this for Twilghtfest, but never filmed it. Thought some of u would want ur fix in the epic saga known as TDRP! Anyways enjoy!


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“THE DUSTIN ROGAN PROJECT II”
BY
DUSTIN R. ROGAN
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7301 SANGER AVE. APT. 229
WACO, TEXAS 76712
254.709.5952
FADE IN:
INT. HOUSE
MATT BRAVO and PRESENT DUSTIN ARE conversing on the phone
DUSTIN is driving and MATT is in a house.
MATT BRAVO
So I’ve been concerned about something lately.
PRESENT DUSTIN
What?
MATT BRAVO
Ok, I’m sure you’ve heard about that Senator that got caught in the men’s restroom at the airport right?
PRESENT DUSTIN
Yeah.
MATT BRAVO (CONT’D)
Well, I sometimes get bored waiting for it to happen…
PRESENT DUSTIN looks confused
PRESENT DUSTIN
It?
MATT BRAVO
You know it…Number 2; (beat) anyways when I’m waiting I play the air drums. *Now apparently there is a code for initiating encounters.
PRESENT DUSTIN
What the hell are you talking about?
MATT BRAVO
What if all this time I was sending out gay Morse code while waiting to finish my business?
PRESENT DUSTIN
Are you serious? (Beat)
MATT BRAVO
Yeah man, Gay men love me.
PRESENT DUSTIN
I’m sure they do. (Beat) Hey some of the guys say they are going to meet me at my house for drinks and throw out some ideas for the next fest, so if you wanna show up tomorrow about 3.
MATT BRAVO
Yeah, sure.
PRESENT DUSTIN
Cool, I gotta go. Later.
FADE IN:
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM
Camera dollies across interrogation table, TIME COP INVESTIGATOR is yelling at FUTURE DUSTIN
TIME COP INVESTIGATOR
This is for you. *Take your time reading it, cause it’s the last thing you’ll ever read. *(to off camera) Time Bandits, ready the gas chamber!
Dustin mouths “gas chamber”
The cop exits the room, Dustin opens the note.
NOTE FROM JASON
You failed at what I asked of you. *I’ve decided to give you one last chance, because I’m a generous person. *However if you fail me again, you’ll wish I had let you die. *Hidden inside this paper is something that will help you escape. *When you’re done reading this crumple it into a ball and it will arm itself, once it’s thrown it will take down even the toughest of opposition. *Do not fail me again! *Ttyls.
The time cop enters into the room
Dustin crumples the paper into a ball
TIME COP INVESTIGATOR
Now I hope you’ve had your fun
She slaps Dustin across the face.
TIME COP INVESTIGATOR
No games Rogan! *It’s time to die. *Come on!
Time cop turns her back to Dustin; he throws the paper at the time cop.
The Time Cop drops.
FUTURE DUSTIN ROGAN goes to the computer, Takes off his jumpsuit and time travels.
EXT. LAKE DAM – TDRP HILL
The camera swiftly moves down the pathway towards the TDRP hill.
Behind Present Dustin, Future Dustin appears from nowhere flanked by ninjas.
FUTURE DUSTIN
You’re done Rogan!
He gives an evil laugh
The Fraubots come from behind Present Dustin and stand in front of him, in a defense position
The two groups commence in an epic battle
Ninja throws a Chinese Star at one of the Fraubots and she catches it with her hands.
The Other Ninja and Fraubot are exchanging blows/blocks
Future Dustin comes towards Present Dustin, aims his hand in an open position and fires a ray o’ awesomeness at Present Dustin.
Present Dustin is knocked to the ground by a fraubot saving his life. *She lies on top of him
PRESENT DUSTIN
I think I love you
The Fraubots grab Present Dustin and run off.
INT. CAR
All pile into the car
PRESENT DUSTIN
You are the most beautiful girl I’ve ever met
The Fraubot hands him a device.
PRESENT DUSTIN
What’s this?
Present Dustin hits the play button.
SIMON HOFER
Guten Tag Her Dustin. *I hope this reaches you in time. *I have received top secret German intelligence regarding your safety. *You must look out for…
The message begins to go static, like something’s interfering.
Dustin whacks the device to get it to work.
PRESENT DUSTIN
Something is wrong with this thing.
He looks up then out the front of the car, notices a naked black man teleporting into the middle of the road.
PRESENT DUSTIN
Whoa whoa, watch out!
The man is yelling and waving his hands erratically.
TIME COP
Stop! *I have important inform…
The car hits the man, and continues to drive down the road.
Present Dustin, freaking out, quickly turns his head to see the man lying in the middle of the road, then disappears.
PRESENT DUSTIN
What the hell? *You hit that naked man, and then he ****in’ disappeared. *What the hell is going on here!
The Fraubot motions for him to play the device again.
He hits play
PRESENT DUSTIN
Its messed up.
The message begins to replay.
SIMON HOFER
Guten Tag Herr Dustin. *I hope this reaches you in time. *I have received top secret German intelligence regarding your safety. *You must look out for a time traveling you. *He is hell bent on destroying you. *The authorities have already deployed officers in the area. *The lovely beauties here with you are my personal Fraubots to escort you to the safe house. *God speed my friend.
Dustin looks around at each Fraubots.
PRESENT DUSTIN
So, is all your machinery in, um working order?
One of the Fraubots slaps Dustin in the face.
Shocked, Dustin turns and faces the front of the car.
INT. FUTURE DUSTIN HQ
Future Dustin paces back and forth with a NERF basketball in his hands.
The Ninjas stand at attention with their hands behind their backs.
FUTURE DUSTIN
Curses, He got away. *He’ll rue the day that you made that abomination he called The Dustin Rogan Project.
Looks at one of the ninjas
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FUTURE DUSTIN
You know, I really despise myself sometimes, well not myself, the old me...well you know what I mean.
Walks over to the other ninja
FUTURE DUSTIN
I blame you for allowing him to escape
Future Dustin walks out, the two ninjas look at each other and shrug.
INT. HOUSE
Dustin walks through the front door.
Matt Bravo, David Wiseman and Colt Stewart are playing Rock Band at Dustin’s apartment.
Jason Pruett is sitting on the couch drinking water
JASON PRUETT
Yeah Sir!
PRESENT DUSTIN
Why are you guys always here?
COLT STEWART
Eeehh Rock Band!
Dustin goes and slumps on the couch
The guys pause the game
DAVID WISEMAN
What’s up with you?
Dustin peers out the blinds
MATT BRAVO
Dustin, is everything alright?
Dustin nods
JASON PRUETT
Sir you don’t look so good, you look like you just seen a ghost.
Dustin building up the courage to say something
PRESENT DUSTIN
I think I just saw myself… (Beat) and I didn’t have any pants on
Colt does the fake vomit noise, Kelly follows suit
Matt and David both laugh
Jason Pruett rubs his goatee, like he is thinking
MATT BRAVO
Why weren’t you wearing pants?
Dustin gives a heavy sigh, and gets up off the couch
PRESENT DUSTIN
No not me me…another me. *Someone that looked acted and sounded like me.
The guys give a curious look
PRESENT DUSTIN (CONT’D)
He was wearing this black coat
And said “You’re finished, I’m taking over from here”. *Kind of strange. *Then these really hot chicks came and attacked these guys in ninja costumes, they were called Fraubots…and Simon says I’m in danger of myself…and a naked guy standing in the middle of the road…all so strange
DAVID WISEMAN
Why was the naked guy standing in the road?
Present Dustin looks at David
PRESENT DUSTIN
Out of all that, the naked guy stands out in your mind…I knew it dude.
It clicks in Matt’s head what Present Dustin saw.
MATT BRAVO
Ahh (beat) remember when we were shooting The Dustin Rogan Project
Dustin shakes his head yes
MATT BRAVO (CONT’D)
While you’re off shooting, this guy claiming to be you from the future tried to get Gary and me to stop the movie from being made.
PRESENT DUSTIN
What? (Beat) Did he say why?
MATT BRAVO
He didn’t tell us why, just that we had to.
INT FUTURE DUSTIN HQ
Jason standing sinisterly at the doorway
FUTURE JASON SPINOS
Oh hi der.
Future Dustin dismisses the ninjas
FUTURE DUSTIN
I’m doing everything I can, sir.
​FUTURE JASON SPINOS
That’s what I was afraid of. (Beat) *The end is near.
Evil laugh
FADE OUT
VOICE OVER
NARRATOR
What will Jason plan to eliminate Dustin?
Will one of the ninjas fall in love with one of the Fraubots?
Will Gary French ever appear on camera again?
‘…TO BE CONTINUED’
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For some reason it didn't keeep the correct format

Rogan
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You can try reformatting it using the [ code ] and [ /code ] commands. That should keep everything looking good if you exported the script as formatted text.

As for the story itself, I have to admit that I was a little confused at times concerning what was happening. There certainly were a lot of intriguing elements in the story, including ninjas, time cops, and fraubots (are these like fembots?), but I never really grasped the cohesive whole.
 
I get that the point is to read it.

That implies a little bit of responsibility on your part, to make it readable.
 
Dustin R. Rogan said:
i'm guessing you guys dont read that it didn't transfer correctly...oh well you totally missed the point....

Rogan
Click to expand...

I did see that towards the end of your post, thus why I recommended that you try to use the [ code ] and [ /code ] commands, which will keep formatting in text.

I also still read the post. I commented that I was confused by what happens in the story. I provided positive feedback in noting that there are many unique elements present in the script.

I understand that this is supposed to be a witty, funny, crazy story, but it just doesn't translate well through the words themselves. The most characterization we receive to set-up the scene is that Dustin is driving and Matt is in a house. It might help if you use more action verbs and fewer conjugations of "to be."

Look, this writing has room for improvement. You have some potential points of interest with all the wacky stuff that happens, but that's still more to learn. There are plenty of resources here to help you improve your writing, but I'll sum them up:

1. Keep writing a lot.
2. Read a lot of good screenplays (and even good novels).
3. Read "how to" screenwriting books.
 
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