SUNFLOWER - My first short - need feedback

[ryanz]

There's a ton of problems with this but I think if anything it shows some potential.

Shot with dvx100 24pa squeeze

Let me know what you think.

-thanks

http://www.vimeo.com/907773

 

[egyptianboxer104]

pretty good. I think when she killed the first guy you should have cut immediatly to him after the gun shot and maybe have his head sorta moving a little like a reflex or something. The sound quality could be improved. But it's a good start for sure.