EJ Pennypacker
Well-known member
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Greetings to those interested in receiving 'development notes' on their film screenplay for a very affordable price.
WHO I AM...
I have worked for two indie NYC production companies in the capacity as a Script Reader. One is Andrew Lauren Productions (The Squid and the Whale*) and the other Forensic Films (Raising Victor Vargas).
*Which won the Waldo Salt Screenwriting award at Sundance last year, and nominated for an Oscar this year.
WHAT YOU GET...
Aside from receiving the minimum of a six page 12pt font review of your
material (Page-by-Page Notes & Overall Comments including notes on Concept, Story, Character & Dialogue, plus more) via e-mail, expect your notes to be turned around within 3 days, once (check or PayPal) payment is confirmed. The service also includes email conversation/ questions on notes, for clarification if needed.
One client was lucky enough to receive a FOURTEEN page review - of course it can differ from script-to-script. In addition, I have been used for consultation by one person on five occasions now. Also, one person recently clamped down an option on a script I reviewed.
All this for a DVXuser price of $80
I welcome any and all questions to nycdevelopment *at* hotmail.com, and please include DVXuser in the subject title.
Kind regards,
Daniel (aka EJ)
JUST SOME OF THE COMMENTS ON MY NOTES SO FAR...
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"Received your notes back from my script. An absolutely awesome, detailed
review. I agree with 98% of your assessment and will be implementing them
into my re-write. I've used other script consultants [Script Pimp] in the
past, buy you are truly the first to provide me with the kind of notes that
really make a difference. I will definitely use your service on our future
scripts."
LoganSF1 - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"Thanks very much for the detailed and insightful notes. I've read through
them and there's a lot that makes sense. When I have some time I'm going
to give XXXX a major rewrite and will definitely turn back to your notes to
guide me."
Umbhali - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"You're one astute fella--many THANKS for your lucid and thorough
observations. Maybe the best 45 I ever spent!"
Doctor Demento - Done Deal
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"I think I'm having a deeply religious experience, I keep falling to my knees
and saying "Oh my God!" over and over.
Thanks much for taking the time, I appreciate your feedback. I knew the
script was in no way perfect but I'd no idea it was THAT screwed. The more
I read your notes, the louder the alarm bells rang until I couldn't hear myself
think any more. Yeah, it's THAT screwed.
I'll be going over your notes again line by line but it's fairly obvious I'm
in deep trouble -- big chunks of the script just ain't working and the
overall product is a royal mess. Talk about being blind to your own
mistakes!"
DPaterson - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"Great notes. I'll take your notes to heart when I'm doing my rewrite.
Thanks for taking the time in critiquing my script; I really appreciate the
time you took in giving me thoughtful comments. They will be helpful."
cmmora - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"The notes were extremely useful as were the web links you sent. Who
knows what the future will bring but I do intend a re-write using your
advice & have filed away your email address - I would like you to see
the changes & advise on them at some point..."
Lynn Graham - Shooting People
_____________________________________________
"I agree with pretty much all of your notes and will re-write shortly.
I also have a 26 page treatment that I may like feedback on - do
you provide notes on treatments?"
James Tapp - Shooting People
_____________________________________________
"Thanks for the notes - as expected, they are precise and to the point... Thanks for all your hard work and the quick turnaround - it's appreciated! You've given me plenty to think about."
Lucy Hay (Story Consultant/Writer) - Shooting People
_____________________________________________
“The product was excellent as I'm sure you have heard numerous times before... What can I say other than I have another script I would like you to look at, that I would like to send to you soon."
James Young - UK
_____________________________________________
After receiving a note to tell me her script had received development funding, and me sending her a thanks note, she wrote: "Thanks Daniel! And yes, I'll drop you a line as soon as I need another consultation. You're great at what you do."
Nikki Anne Schmutz - (published author and produced screenwriter)
_____________________________________________
“I think you were right on with much of your script notes… I told another buddy of mine about your service. Hopefully, he will be sending you his script very soon.”
Allen Wilbanks – Producer/Dir. – MOTOR HOME MASSACRE (www.motorhomemassacre.com LGF)
_____________________________________________
Also, feel free to check out the "Script Analysts" thread over at Done Deal http://messageboard.donedealpro.com/boards/showthread.php?t=7443&page=2
And in addition, feel free to read an interview with Head of the
Story Department at Disney Studios, Kevin Brady, which I co-hosted with
Done Deal's own website master, under my pen name of EJ Pennypacker http://www.donedealpro.com/members/details.aspx?object_id=169&content_type=1§ion_id=11
Greetings to those interested in receiving 'development notes' on their film screenplay for a very affordable price.
WHO I AM...
I have worked for two indie NYC production companies in the capacity as a Script Reader. One is Andrew Lauren Productions (The Squid and the Whale*) and the other Forensic Films (Raising Victor Vargas).
*Which won the Waldo Salt Screenwriting award at Sundance last year, and nominated for an Oscar this year.
WHAT YOU GET...
Aside from receiving the minimum of a six page 12pt font review of your
material (Page-by-Page Notes & Overall Comments including notes on Concept, Story, Character & Dialogue, plus more) via e-mail, expect your notes to be turned around within 3 days, once (check or PayPal) payment is confirmed. The service also includes email conversation/ questions on notes, for clarification if needed.
One client was lucky enough to receive a FOURTEEN page review - of course it can differ from script-to-script. In addition, I have been used for consultation by one person on five occasions now. Also, one person recently clamped down an option on a script I reviewed.
All this for a DVXuser price of $80
I welcome any and all questions to nycdevelopment *at* hotmail.com, and please include DVXuser in the subject title.
Kind regards,
Daniel (aka EJ)
JUST SOME OF THE COMMENTS ON MY NOTES SO FAR...
_____________________________________________
"Received your notes back from my script. An absolutely awesome, detailed
review. I agree with 98% of your assessment and will be implementing them
into my re-write. I've used other script consultants [Script Pimp] in the
past, buy you are truly the first to provide me with the kind of notes that
really make a difference. I will definitely use your service on our future
scripts."
LoganSF1 - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"Thanks very much for the detailed and insightful notes. I've read through
them and there's a lot that makes sense. When I have some time I'm going
to give XXXX a major rewrite and will definitely turn back to your notes to
guide me."
Umbhali - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"You're one astute fella--many THANKS for your lucid and thorough
observations. Maybe the best 45 I ever spent!"
Doctor Demento - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"I think I'm having a deeply religious experience, I keep falling to my knees
and saying "Oh my God!" over and over.
Thanks much for taking the time, I appreciate your feedback. I knew the
script was in no way perfect but I'd no idea it was THAT screwed. The more
I read your notes, the louder the alarm bells rang until I couldn't hear myself
think any more. Yeah, it's THAT screwed.
I'll be going over your notes again line by line but it's fairly obvious I'm
in deep trouble -- big chunks of the script just ain't working and the
overall product is a royal mess. Talk about being blind to your own
mistakes!"
DPaterson - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"Great notes. I'll take your notes to heart when I'm doing my rewrite.
Thanks for taking the time in critiquing my script; I really appreciate the
time you took in giving me thoughtful comments. They will be helpful."
cmmora - Done Deal
_____________________________________________
"The notes were extremely useful as were the web links you sent. Who
knows what the future will bring but I do intend a re-write using your
advice & have filed away your email address - I would like you to see
the changes & advise on them at some point..."
Lynn Graham - Shooting People
_____________________________________________
"I agree with pretty much all of your notes and will re-write shortly.
I also have a 26 page treatment that I may like feedback on - do
you provide notes on treatments?"
James Tapp - Shooting People
_____________________________________________
"Thanks for the notes - as expected, they are precise and to the point... Thanks for all your hard work and the quick turnaround - it's appreciated! You've given me plenty to think about."
Lucy Hay (Story Consultant/Writer) - Shooting People
_____________________________________________
“The product was excellent as I'm sure you have heard numerous times before... What can I say other than I have another script I would like you to look at, that I would like to send to you soon."
James Young - UK
_____________________________________________
After receiving a note to tell me her script had received development funding, and me sending her a thanks note, she wrote: "Thanks Daniel! And yes, I'll drop you a line as soon as I need another consultation. You're great at what you do."
Nikki Anne Schmutz - (published author and produced screenwriter)
_____________________________________________
“I think you were right on with much of your script notes… I told another buddy of mine about your service. Hopefully, he will be sending you his script very soon.”
Allen Wilbanks – Producer/Dir. – MOTOR HOME MASSACRE (www.motorhomemassacre.com LGF)
_____________________________________________
Also, feel free to check out the "Script Analysts" thread over at Done Deal http://messageboard.donedealpro.com/boards/showthread.php?t=7443&page=2
And in addition, feel free to read an interview with Head of the
Story Department at Disney Studios, Kevin Brady, which I co-hosted with
Done Deal's own website master, under my pen name of EJ Pennypacker http://www.donedealpro.com/members/details.aspx?object_id=169&content_type=1§ion_id=11
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