"Simon Van Winkle" by Robert Werden (Time Fest)

Gary Sconce said:
Just watched the film and thought it was entertaining. Good effect on him freezing with the clouds speeding up.

Just a few thoughts from a scientific and cultural point of view: If a guy was frozen out in public like that and couldn't be touched or moved due to some sort of time bubble effect, wouldn't those left moving build something akin to a roof to protect him and place signs around him? :cheesy: He would be a serious tourist attraction.:happy:

Also the letter and its container could have been aged to match the amount of time they sat by him... Nearly 920 years after the girls died. A metal box, rusted and aged would have fit the shot better.
Still, you did very well! Thanks for the hard work. :Drogar-Happy(DBG):
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I wanted to put a stone plaque at his feet, describing him as the first time traveler and giving the date he would be there. There was supposed to be a character that handed him the box while executing the will of Ally (boob girl), but he could not make the shot and it was the last day before the film was due, so we changed the script to do the ADR.
 
Existentialist said:
That was fun. Editing could be tighter.

Did you shoot this on an HVX?
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Yes it was on an HVX. I also used the M2 with a Zeiss 50mm for the whole shoot.

Editing was one of my biggest issues. I rushed through it the morning the film was due. I also did the sky replacement shot in AE (thanks Andrew Kramer) and the time travel effects at the same time. Had I planned better, I would have scheduled editing with at least a full week to work.
 
I don't know if there is a prize for best first film (I guess that would be hard to verify), but if so, I nominate you. Especially given that it was done in one week.

Other have touched on some of the technical flaws, so I won't rehash. It sounds like you already learned so much. The important thing is that the story was clever and coherently told - much easier said than done. Looking forward to your next film.
 
This was my final movie to watch, i thought it was good. The acting wasn't perfect but good enough to get the idea across (similar to my own film).

The effects were decent and the story too but as i imagine most people also figured out how this one would end from the title.

Would have been nice to give it a bit more of a twist or something fun. Good work though, especially for a first entry.
 
Will Clegg said:
I don't know if there is a prize for best first film (I guess that would be hard to verify), but if so, I nominate you. Especially given that it was done in one week.

Other have touched on some of the technical flaws, so I won't rehash. It sounds like you already learned so much. The important thing is that the story was clever and coherently told - much easier said than done. Looking forward to your next film.
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Thanks, that was really nice
 
Moojangles said:
This was my final movie to watch, i thought it was good. The acting wasn't perfect but good enough to get the idea across (similar to my own film).

The effects were decent and the story too but as i imagine most people also figured out how this one would end from the title.

Would have been nice to give it a bit more of a twist or something fun. Good work though, especially for a first entry.
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The twist was actually supposed to be the contents of the box at the end.
 
What a funny story - and the end was very good. I particulary found the main character very sweet. Sometimes I like to be back in the teenager time!!!! Compliments.

Susanne
 
Ha ha ha..... that was great. Though I thought there'd be a pic of her boobs in the box!

Very nice and you show real promise, my friend!
 
robertwerden said:
I wanted to put a stone plaque at his feet, describing him as the first time traveler and giving the date he would be there. There was supposed to be a character that handed him the box while executing the will of Ally (boob girl), but he could not make the shot and it was the last day before the film was due, so we changed the script to do the ADR.
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Aw, isn't it a pain when those scheduled to help with a shot don't show up? We went through some of that on Impossible Race. Still, you sure made a neato film! GREAT WORK!
 
Mark Johnson said:
Ha ha ha..... that was great. Though I thought there'd be a pic of her boobs in the box!
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Me too, I liked the idea and anotther film I'd like to see extended. :)

I noticed that the picture appeared to keep 'jumping' though.
 
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Hey,

Just caught the flick. I must say, I dig your idea. People have already pointed out the technical issues so I'll skip that.

The effects worked for me. I like that you cut back to the two shot on the girls when he travels the first time and there's a flash of light on them. Good attention to detail there.

I think this would have been a stronger piece if the characters were fleshed out better. Are these girls he wouldn't normally talk to? Or talk with him? I kinda got that vibe when he saw them, but then it got lost because they just seemed like awkward friends. Also, it's hard to see how the motivations work here. Does he help with the silver dollar thing to improve his chances with them (if we're talking about the guy trying to pick up girls he doesn't really have the chance to). Whatever the characters are like and how they relate to each other I would have liked to see it fleshed out. I like the story, but for my money it would have been stronger had it somehow worked into some character developement.

All in all a decent first attempt. Looking forward to what you do in the future.
 
Danielleus said:
Hey,

Just caught the flick. I must say, I dig your idea. People have already pointed out the technical issues so I'll skip that.

The effects worked for me. I like that you cut back to the two shot on the girls when he travels the first time and there's a flash of light on them. Good attention to detail there.

I think this would have been a stronger piece if the characters were fleshed out better. Are these girls he wouldn't normally talk to? Or talk with him? I kinda got that vibe when he saw them, but then it got lost because they just seemed like awkward friends. Also, it's hard to see how the motivations work here. Does he help with the silver dollar thing to improve his chances with them (if we're talking about the guy trying to pick up girls he doesn't really have the chance to). Whatever the characters are like and how they relate to each other I would have liked to see it fleshed out. I like the story, but for my money it would have been stronger had it somehow worked into some character developement.

All in all a decent first attempt. Looking forward to what you do in the future.
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Thanks. I wanted to expand on the story in so many areas, but the 6 min were really working against that. I actually have 60 min of cuts that probably would have made the story work better. There was a 3d animation sequence as well that showed the house crumbling around him that I just could not get rendered in time.

Simon was supposed to be just that, an awkward friend that is attempting to get the girl. The scene when he asked Ally for the kiss was where you see his teen hormones striking the deal. After the coins, Ally realizes that his motivation is sex, and offers up the treat she thinks he will do anything for.

Because Ally then feels guilty for him being stuck in time, she gives him the opportunity if he is able to come back to her and eludes to something more. If that is to be for her own gain or his was something I wanted to be left to the viewer to decide.

This is really where thinking as a 16 year old comes into play. They are at the gray area between innocent and the things we adopt as an adult.
 
Simon, you hound dog you… Going back in time only to give the girl a kiss on the cheek…

Music worked well with the film.

Congrats on entering the fest.
 
Wow, is this really your first film? If so, I would definitely nominate you for 'Best First'. Out of curiosity, how old are you?

Technically its accomplished and the general idea wasn't that bad. Couple o things. If he time travels to 1921 and retrieves five coins for a kiss, it better at least be a good frencher and not a cheek peck :-).

Was the second girl your wife/sister/gf? (judging by last name).

Oh yeah, nothing like the promise of underage nudity to keep a timefest entry intersting :-D (i kid, I kid)
 
shawneous said:
Wow, is this really your first film? If so, I would definitely nominate you for 'Best First'. Out of curiosity, how old are you?

Technically its accomplished and the general idea wasn't that bad. Couple o things. If he time travels to 1921 and retrieves five coins for a kiss, it better at least be a good frencher and not a cheek peck :-).

Was the second girl your wife/sister/gf? (judging by last name).

Oh yeah, nothing like the promise of underage nudity to keep a timefest entry intersting :-D (i kid, I kid)
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Yes it is my first film. I just got my camera last year and up till now have only shot landscapes and family events. I know this will probably sound bad, but im 37. The girl who played Jen is my daughter who is 16. Janson who played Ally is also 16 and David who played Simon is 14. None of them are actors and this was also their first film.
 
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