i dunno man, the characters were all pretty well set up, and you had a good like act I, if you will, but you didnt really go anywhere with it. you basically ended it, right after the set up. you skipped having a second act all togetehr, and went right to the resoloution, so it didnt really work. on the camera work side of it, it was pretty good. so, the only advice i have is just take your characters farther next time, becasue your pretty good at fleshing them out. okay, peace.
thanks for you feedback, i wrote a script but ofcourse if you are not paying people to do something they will not follow the way everything was planned...this project was also supposed to be under twn minutes so it was kindof hard to make it work in that time....thanks again...
