Short Film- The Glorified Pool Boys

[IndieFilmer]

My first complete film, from script to screen in about a week. Just looking for some critiques. I want to learn as much as possible and im always open to new ideas, thanks everyone, hope you all enjoy. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0A10XNs2A-k

 

[jonE5]

lol, i would have liked to see the script a little better flushed out. But overall pretty well executed.

Nice camera work, good movement, good framming and composition, no real complaints on shaky camera, or to still (mistakes i made on my first few films).

For a first try, you have some talent i can tell.

Sound was a little echoy in some spots, that needs improvement.

Effects were cool.

Acting was hit or miss, but cant really blame the director for that.

Id say spend a bit more time on the script next time, you seem to have the technical aspect down pretty well.

Cant wait to see more from you.