Seven Eleven Movie Trailer

i think it is a bit slow paced. also, it does not leave the viewer with any idea of what happens in the story. ...just my opinion. take it for what its worth.

try using some different titles and fonts. i.e. no red text at the end and such.
 
thanks man, its a very complicated movie that does not have a certain ending, I love the reaction that the audience is going to experience
 
I understand it's rough, so here's my 2 cents...
Not sure what your looking for, who you are, or how much experience you have, so I wont be TO critical...
Learn from my mistakes, when you make a trailer, put your best shots, and best scenes, but don't give away the entire story and dont show it till its you think it's GREAT.. It AINT easy.. But from what I watched I have no CLUE whats going on, all I see is a few good shots, some really bad sound in the scene in the kitchen, and some really dark shots that look underlit..
The breakdancer was ok, but not 2x ok.. the lighting for that scene wasn't good enough to watch it again..

Make sure you don't post anything that your not confident in. Because if your not, we wont be.
 
ALEX,
congratulations on making your dreams come true!
HERE, we post our work to IMPROVE ourselves, and to learn from other points of view.
So, don't be offended by anyone...
Having said that, here's my 2 cents:
WHAT I LIKED:
-I liked the dolly shots
-the crane of the house
-the shots of the moving car and the breakdancer gives it a weird vibe...

WHAT YOU CAN IMPROVE:
-the font, maybe have it animated or something.
-The sound: have the actors do an ADR or pull up the volume.
-I've noticed that many independent films (including my first) suffer from poor sound... Make sure to focus on sound, since it is one of the most important elements.
-ALSO some shots have a lot of headroom, try and compose your shots to make them more intriguing.

Other than that, keep working on it, and keep us posted on the final product.
Thanks!
Ricky Mendoza
 
First - a big congrats on getting a feature done - that is no small feat.

For me - the trailer worked (except the breakdancing) - I actually ended up going to the site because I wanted to know what the heck was going on - so it intrigued me and that is good. I also liked the use of moving shots - nice and smooth.

As said before you need to watch your headroom and the space on the side of the actors eyes - sometimes you are framing too tight on the wrong side - that makes its feel rough and makes people notice the camera.

The other strange thing was I wasnt certain it was shot on the HVX until I checked on the site - the color and contrast looked very off - not sure what it was - I am hoping you simply color corrected and either like it that way or can fix it - but the color space made it feel SD and somehow have less quality - that is something you should look into.

good luck with this - a very good start - you just need to keep problem solving as you go along and make it tighter and better.
 
You can have the best story in the world, the most magnificent pictures, the most dynamic and effective use of lighting, and even the best actors on the planet, but sound still makes up (at least) half of a feature. By sound, though, I'm not just speaking in terms of the actor's voices, but rather every sound in the picture. First of all, vocal clarity is imperative. If sound quality is not up to par with picture quality, then you're, for lack of a better term, screwed. Also, your music, vocal, and SFX levels need to remain consistent with each other -- you can't have someone talking quietly and then have a blast of techno or a stock gunfire ring out. It just sounds off, you know?

This is the best advice I can offer you for the short, or rather, it was the problem that stood out the most for me.
 
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