Second video project in film school

I liked it. Was pretty disgusted by the character, which means you did a good job. Washing off the brush in the toilet bowl was a nice touch. From a narrative standpoint, it's great. Compositionally I would have liked to see a wider range of shots, as I think the camera is held in place a little too often (i.e. when he goes to get the mustard, I don't think that pause is necessary, especially when you close-up on the mustard bottle later).

Some minor nitpicks: The last line, which is pretty important to the whole piece, is kind of muffled/barely audible (maybe that's just youtube). It's a college team, but the MNF theme is playing? The radio audio just sounded strange to me, I think it was too much echo?

All in all, I liked it! Thanks
 
Funny short! I agree with acoughla though, the punchline seemed a little understated. Maybe having the music grind down to a halt when he realizes the gate is locked followed by somebody shouting "it's an away game bud!" from a passing car with a beer can bouncing off the street would punch it up (right now you have no reason for the other person to be there).

Chris
 
Come to think of it - you wouldn't even have to re-shoot anything, you could just add some sound effects at the end.

Chris
 
Really liked it. but yes, there needs to be something more to end with. Bigger ending.
But again, I like it.
 
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