Sci-Fi Test Short

[ramsaur]

I just moved & haven't shot a short in a year so I made this. Now it got me to get ideas & write a feature length script for it. I have a new job at a vfx company & was able to pull off my own vfx. Let me know what you guys thick.

 

[artforme]

good stuff man, looks cool. :costumed-smiley-047

 

[Fahad]

good work, man.

(really hate that siren-in general)

 

[Cosimo Bullo]

I like the siren... like the frantic feel. Well done, sir.

 

[adamrahn]

cool stuff - very manic mood you've set. my only criticisms were the obvious jello with the frantic movements (nothing that's too distracting to keep me from watching a short scene though), and the camera shadow on the door when it's been unlocked near the end. Seeing gear/reflections/shadows in narrative work bothers the poo out of me and just takes me out of the illusion. overall you've got a good short scene that really sets a frantic/desperate/other adjectives mood for something more to come. great work

 

[Nathyn]

LOL, love the ship. I like seeing the first part from his POV.

-Nate

 

[ramsaur]

cool stuff - very manic mood you've set. my only criticisms were the obvious jello with the frantic movements (nothing that's too distracting to keep me from watching a short scene though), and the camera shadow on the door when it's been unlocked near the end. Seeing gear/reflections/shadows in narrative work bothers the poo out of me and just takes me out of the illusion. overall you've got a good short scene that really sets a frantic/desperate/other adjectives mood for something more to come. great work

Thanks for the comments, I do agree with some of the jello movements. The shadow didn't matter. A guy is already holding the camera, so we'd just be seeing the shadow of the character. As far as equipment is just the laptop? If just that, it wouldn't matter if it's out or not. But thanks again for the feedback, appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed it.