After reading the draft you sent me, I think Randall's advice is spot on. You do try to incorporate some conflict into the story, which is great (and something many writers overlook). I would add that some unique elements, some originality should be part of the core of your story. You posted this script over on Done Deal Pro too, right? I think one of the posters there said it very well: it's fine to do stuff that's been done before, but what truly separates great writing from good writing is the originality that the writer brings to his / her work.
Personally, that's also the fun part for me. Getting the opportunity to share my personal experience through a universal archetype or story structure is what keeps me going. After all, there are only so many different types of story that can be told, but how we tell them is the truly amazing part.
Personally, that's also the fun part for me. Getting the opportunity to share my personal experience through a universal archetype or story structure is what keeps me going. After all, there are only so many different types of story that can be told, but how we tell them is the truly amazing part.