Revised Harvest of Redemption Trailer

Re: Revised Harvest of Redemption Trailer

My personal 2 cents is (take or leave it)

Open with music and on the line:

MUSIC/BLACK then

"Dont be afraid to tell the truth" and then a cut to the DUDE with the reigns and the music intro on slap of horse.

Show the kids running, show the nice sepia stuff and then, kick in with tempo.

I would get rid of everything else including DUDE waking up and saying "Carmelita"

I would also increase tempo of clips as it builds to the line "Remember me? Cabrone?" (spell?) almost as a creshendo. Id al'so rework (Change font and make it more) the title card that reads "HArvest of Redemption" and get rid of the Card that reads "rio grande 1931"

I love the imagery by the way!
 
Re: Revised Harvest of Redemption Trailer

I definitely like your revisions! The black and white footage looks a lot better, and you've tightened up a lot of the things we mentioned. John has some good suggestions, but overall it's much better!
 
Re: Revised Harvest of Redemption Trailer

Yeah, and I also found this revision seemed to give away less of the story, while still making it intriguing and wanting to watch...

I like the revisions as well. I think the text is a little cheesy though, maybe tone it down a bit.
 
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