SHORT: Resurrection (Experimental Short Action Film)

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Xerxes_Sangco

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Hi everyone,

Just wanted to share an experimental short action film me and a few people completed recently. I hope you guys enjoy it!

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I would appreciate some feedback/criticism as well! :)

 
Hi Xerxes,
I'm a believer in detailed criticism. I think you did a good job and look forward to more. Below is my evaluation.
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0:08 Not sure what is in hand
0:26 Noticeable sound change ambient and music
0:30 Construction site. Why are they walking from some distance place? Why didn't they drive up to the rubble? Then the guy says "This place is as good as any." They were walking to that spot on purpose weren't there? He wouldn't have said that. Not sure if that actors voice sounds that way naturally, but to my ear it sounds faked as is over the top.
0:59 Blood splats don't appear real AE, color off.
1:06 Everyone is in military garb, but the large reflection inn his sunglasses show a guy in white T and shorts.
1:14 Five hits shown on body yet they ripped off hundreds of rounds - bad shots?
1:25 All mil garb and weapons, but wearing tennis shoes? Maybe the camera shouldn't have shown feet?
Also, if doing military all uniforms should be the same pattern. I know - budget. Still, Army-Navy surplus is cheap.
1:36 What made the guy sense to turn around? Here it is clearly seen they are walking to where?
1:51 He warned the armed guys, they raised their weapons, then the guy is shown bursting into a run to kick the main guy. Why didn't they fire - plenty of time. Even after he kicks the first guy, he has time to kick the second guy, and yet the third guy still doesn't fire. Then the third guy is kicked.
2:00 Knife sfx too loud
2:02 He hits the guy in his ribs then there is a hitting sound. Next the guy pulls that huge knife out of his body? Only on TV. :)
2:07 CGI of blast out back too bright
2:30 Was there a large time-lapse in the making as the starting scene appeared mid-day and now it appears late afternoon.

I liked the music and the headphone concept, though I wonder if the music sound shouldn't have been muted at the end as it was what he was listening too - I think.

Story - actually this wasn't a story just a scene. The ressurection itself doesn't create story. Lets just say only one shot was fired and the guy survived (more probable). The audience would expect him to either attack or fake death and seek revenge later. So plot wise you have, walked to execution, shot but not killed, attacks and kills executors. This leave huge story holes that any viewer expects answered or to be provided enough info to ascertain a logical reason. Why executed? Which side was good/bad and why? How did he survive? And even though he survived, so what now? BTW - tell your actors great job.
 
Thank you Sunk! I really appreciate all of your feedback! :)

Points noted and I'll definitely keep them in mind for future reference. This was more of a concept/experimental film so i understand that it makes absolutely no sense haha. But based on the mostly positive feedback we've received so far, we plan on expanding on this film in the near future to make sense of it all.
 
you tried to do some good things and the framing in general is nice. Also the editing is nice.

Few remarks on the SFX: take more care of syncing, it's "ok", but here and there it could have 1 frame more or less.
And 1 frame (or even 1/4th frames) can do a lot.
 
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