Regeneration

[Bridget D.]

Thanks for the comments and the tip about capitalizing the characters. I agree the ending was kind of abrupt. I wrote it right before the uploading was about to close. Hopefully my next script will be better!

 

[Bridget D.]

I love stories with bad ass chicks well done.
Pauly

Thanks - glad you enjoyed it. I am not sure I could write a story with a sissy girl in it. Hmmmm. Maybe a new challenge for me.

 

[tmpafilmer25]

Thanks - glad you enjoyed it. I am not sure I could write a story with a sissy girl in it. Hmmmm. Maybe a new challenge for me.

Go ahead and try, but make sure a bad ass chick is kicking sissy girl's butt in your new challenge, I will watch that flick if it's ever made...

 

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Alex covered everything for me.
Very cool story, just a tad rough in spots.

First script? Wow! Great work. Loved the reversal.

Cheers,

Mike

 

[MrKilloran]

Great job. Badass female's a plus, good action, sort of abrupt and wanted to see where it could go feels more of a transitional point.

Keep it up.

 

[david jerome]

This was entertaining Bridet D. I like the relationship between Quinta and Miles. I like badass Quinta alot. And I like the recklessness of blowing up the hospital room. This is a fun and violent story.

 

[Captain Pierce]

A quick aside to Alex--

then reaches under his seat and pulls out his gun

We don’t know whose gun it is. Just say ‘a gun’.

Don't you think this is maybe just a bit nitpicky? Who else would it belong to, if it's under the seat of his car? "That's odd, don't remember putting that there, I was just reaching for my wallet..."

I wonder if it's really that easy to just turn off that sort of power. I understand that they've been working on it for years, but it's really not like they could test it... And I also wasn't sure why Miles thought he would like Quinta better as a "human" (or should I say "regular human," as she was always "human," just a little enhanced ).

But all in all, a fun little action piece.

(And thanks to seanshack for emailing me the .pdf from the .zip download that I was too blind to notice on the viewing page. )

 

[seansshack]

And thanks to seanshack for emailing me the .pdf from the .zip download that I was too blind to notice on the viewing page.

Welcome.

 

[agalla1]

Enjoyed the script....really enjoyed Quinta...I know you were very pressed for time but I would like to know why Quinta was so important, what is section 8...enquiring minds have to know! I would love to read the sequel! Overall, well done for your first script...a lot of great action! ;-)

 

[arroway]

whoa ending came out of nowhere. where did they get the bomb? didn't seem plausible. good set up, not so good pay off.

"QUINTA
Caleb's men came to the door. Being
the nice girl I am, I invited them
in and then I shot them.'

...is the best line of the contest.