rawlikesushi
Member
So here's my first attempt, and I'm excited to see everyone else's entries! I'm also looking forward to getting some constructive criticism so I can improve on future projects!!!!
Rawlikesushi's Kinetica Commercial
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So here's my first attempt, and I'm excited to see everyone else's entries! I'm also looking forward to getting some constructive criticism so I can improve on future projects!!!!
rawlikesushi
Member
:dankk2:Thanks Jaime V!!! now all i gotta figure out is how you got your dope editing skillz!!!
rawlikesushi
Member
Zoidoid,
Thanks for the well wishes. Can't wait to see everyone's entries!!!!
Thanks for the well wishes. Can't wait to see everyone's entries!!!!
rawlikesushi
Member
Sweeeeeeeeeet!
rawlikesushi
Member
My first entry behind the camera is up and i'm absolutely thrilled to be a part of this fest!!! Please leave me constructive criticism so that i can add it to the ever growing list of things i need to work on!!! Thanks again to Dauntless Films and Jaime V for his mad-editing-skillz!!!!
cinealma
Veteran
Not too bad, I'd say. I like the feel/vibe. Music was good, very Crystal Method-esque. I liked the movement/motion of the piece. The thing that bothered me and kind of took me out of it was the CG Kinetica logos not motion-controlled very well.
A good effort. Thanks for sharing.
A good effort. Thanks for sharing.
rawlikesushi
Member
john:
thanks for the post and comments! keep 'em comin'!!!!!
thanks for the post and comments! keep 'em comin'!!!!!
Jason Ramsey
Admin
I kinda share the same sentiment as mentioned above...
Didn't like that you used the CG Kinetica logos.
You brought me into your spot . The music, and style of your spot meshed well togethor, and you drew me into it from the first frames. But, then you shook me out of it with the Kinetica Logos shaking around
The shot of the girl doing the cartwheel in her front yard was a bit cheese for me within the context of the rest of the 'activities' I saw. If she was in a gym, or with a 'squad' of some sort, then ok... Otherwise, it looked like "stand here in the front yard and do some cartwheels".
I also kinda felt like your spot needed a bit of narration for whatever reason... In this case, I thought it might have helped tie everything together a bit better, as I didn't get the strongest impression of the product you were promoting.
You did translate the 'mood' that you were trying to get across, but I feel you could have gone further... Tightened things up more.
Just my late night opinions.
Thanks for sharing.
Didn't like that you used the CG Kinetica logos.
You brought me into your spot . The music, and style of your spot meshed well togethor, and you drew me into it from the first frames. But, then you shook me out of it with the Kinetica Logos shaking around
The shot of the girl doing the cartwheel in her front yard was a bit cheese for me within the context of the rest of the 'activities' I saw. If she was in a gym, or with a 'squad' of some sort, then ok... Otherwise, it looked like "stand here in the front yard and do some cartwheels".
I also kinda felt like your spot needed a bit of narration for whatever reason... In this case, I thought it might have helped tie everything together a bit better, as I didn't get the strongest impression of the product you were promoting.
You did translate the 'mood' that you were trying to get across, but I feel you could have gone further... Tightened things up more.
Just my late night opinions.
Thanks for sharing.