Opening scene to "Celery"

[Mike Manning]

Here's an early cut of the opening scene to my short, "Celery." Just hoping to get a little feedback.
Click here, quicktime required.
Just a note: Much of the scene is without picture...the 20 seconds of black it starts with is intentional. You'll see why when you watch it.

For any of you familiar with these characters, or need recapping, check out this link

 

[Iskandar]

It seems to me very clean! I envy your actors.
They also seem very natural and comfortable with you.

 

[Evan S]

I am wondering if the actors in real life talk "proper".

 

[Mike Manning]

I am wondering if the actors in real life talk "proper".

"proper" as in "without slang"?
Yes, they are acting.

 

[Iskandar]

So, good acting!!!

 

[Mike Manning]

Thanks. iskandar.

Anyone else? How does it feel as the opening to an hour long movie?

 

[thef0x]

As a learker, I've been watching this project for a while and I'm excited to see this scene--I'll edit this post once I've finished it.

 

[PaPa]

like the black guys

the guys in the restaurant bug me, i say that cause i saw what you posted a while back and their acting still is annoying. not genuin, feels staged. But well done non the less!

 

[DonCleary]

You tricked me. For a minute there I thought I was watching a Tarantino film.

don
doncleary.com

 

[Lake Films]

Really clean looking images, was this CC? Looks like a cool flick.

 

[Mike Manning]

You tricked me. For a minute there I thought I was watching a Tarantino film.

Who's Tarantino? Is that a good thing?

Really clean looking images, was this CC? Looks like a cool flick

Thanks, I have not done any CC yet. Oh wait, I lied, the brief shot in the restraunt is CC'd.
And scene 9 is color corrected (the scene inside the car)...not sure if you were referring to that one though.

 

[JZalutsky]

its pretty good, I would say the lighting inside though is very flat....its super clean and nice but theres not really a key or any source pointed out its just like bright and nice. maybe thats what you wanted though i donno. would like to see the whole thing thouhg.

 

[Mike Manning]

it was tough to light in the restraunt...seeing as how they were open for business. but i get what your saying