ON THE 26th DAY - John LaBonney

It's always nice to try something different so good on you for that.

I think the audio could use a little more sound design but overall it was pretty good. I wasn't convinced by the scene with his daughter. It almost looked like he just laid down on the floor and you shot the scene. I wanted him looking a little more worse for wear.

Just a little more raw and dirty considering the subject matter.

Some image grading may help in this area as well. Darker, more grain, almost dirty.

Aside from that the acting was decent and the story was well told. I'm glad that you managed to get something in even if it was last minute.

Well done.

MAH
 
Image grading and sound design are areas I really need to learn about. This needed a score I think as well.

Thanks for watching, the comments are appreciated!
 
good subject matter. i think your lead did a good job too. it kinda played too fast maybe for my taste and i think this story can draw out a lot more from it with a longer scene here and there, but i think it was cool how you showed him looking for a job and then got into it. i found myself rooting for him to make it to day 27 at the end so i think this makes for a good job!
 
This film was just the right size for the message. It hopped along at a good pace wich totally kept my attention and interest. Many of the films this time around are dragging but yours cut well. I like the use of split-screen and your use of audio transition. For the subject matter, I will agree with an above post that some shots could be grittier and color graded or maybe make the entire thing black and white and crank the contrast, etc.

Great work!

:beer:
 
Cool story. I liked the way you worked in the choice that was being made. The acting was a bit too reserved for the topic, except for the dealer who felt real.

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Acting and writing was actually really good in this... however, some of the technical shortcomings distracted from an otherwise compelling short...

Nice work John! You're getting better, for sure!
 
Hey man ... Great Acting on a simple and very honest movie ... I really love a good drama ... and this surely is one ... the lack of great visuals / cinematography are shadowed by the direction of this short ... Good job man ... keep it up ...
 
Hi John,

I think this was done very simply, but very well. It didn't need a big score, because it wouldn't have fit the message. Your story was very good, your actor did a very good job.
I wasn't a big fan of the druggy friend, trying too hard to make him cool. I think you could have done more with their meeting with regards to location. It was a bit simple and a long shot, to both be walking there at the same time... the question of why came to my mind. The way the firend was dressed you'd expect him to come past in a sports car.
A fitting ending that explained the movies name.

Overall though, a good short with a good message. Well done.
 
John, I liked this a lot. It may not be as technically impressive as some of the others, but you had a good story. You kept it simple and you didn't over play it. So many shorts in this fest used every last second of the six minutes and it was really great to see this little drama played for honesty and the power of a moment in time. Well done.
 
Hey John. Nice short. I liked the choice of a very real subject matter and the way you played it very straightforward. The acting was well done and the camerawork and editing was very effective. I applaud you for your great pacing as I often struggle to keep my work concise. I think your work as a whole that I've seen is very genuine and you're demonstrating a penchance for relatable human works. Good job man!
 
The story here is not a new one, and I don't really feel like you tried to tell it in any new way. However, it is one that I usually go in for as it can produce a very touching film. This one, was not that film though. The acting was not very good. I really wanted to believe your actors, as there was a lot of good "stuff" for them to sink their teeth into, but I didn't get the feeling that any of them "took a bite" so to speak. The shots seemed hurried to me and didn't seem to have a smooth flow to them. The sound was really bad in parts and vaguely ok in others. Honestly, I was disappointed by this film as I actually like these types of movies.

Thank you for sharing!
 
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