Looks pretty good to me, good job with the smoke too. Only thing that makes it sort of hard to tell what the final product will be like is the lack of anything in the background. Remember you'll have to light your background accordingly to sell the theme as well. These shots look good for stills, but for an actual film, you'd need some pretty good art direction going on in the BG.
Thanks a lot btown, that asks for somewhat bigger budget but yes you are right.
Yes David. I have seen a couple of noirs that were pretty dark, didn't like it a lot that way. People walking around in the dark. But these are just jazz sesssionn stage shots.