New spec commercial

Re: New spec commercial

The ony thing that I noticed, and I am no pro so dont take me too serious, but it almost looks like a jump cut between the first two shots.. really similar shots with the framing of the guy and girl.
Brian

my 1 cent
 
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I like it! I really love the content and the idea and the dialog and all of that, but ever since I did this 5 sec film contest, I realize that so much can be said in a short period of time. I think it could be even shorter. Also, there's one jarring cut from the master shot to the mcu....
But I think it's brilliant. If you tightened it up, it wouldn't look like a SPEC, it'd look like a commercial.
good stuff.
 
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Nice job, man. Probably don't need the text at the end IF the people watching already know what The Laundry Spa is. Not knowing the creative strategy, I can't say if the lack of explanation is right or wrong (sorry to sound like an ad geek, but I'm a copywriter). The spot itself is very well done and funny and reel-worthy. Basically, if The Laundry Spa is well-known, leave it as is. If not, you may need to tinker.

Fox
 
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Haha, good commercial. I think it would rock if he wiped his mouth with the cashmir (sp?) cloth then like, put it under the baby's chin as he gave the baby a sip - just as the mother busts in and grabs it out of his hands - making it look like she's going for the glass, but takes the cloth away instead (being that the cloth would be directly under the glass). Same dialogue and ending.
 
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Big thanks. Right now we are still on the line. On one hand with "pamper your clothes" it's so obvious: pamper=baby, pamper your clothes= care about your clothes evn more then the baby... My copywriter thinks we should add the "explanation" line but then it looks like enough people got it without.
 
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Hey
I would need to see the words at the end. You dont want to leave things to the imagination of the viewer because he might not get and than think it is dumb and wont want to take their clothes there etc. I would say you need that reiteration at the end for the slow people. That is my opinion at least.
Look real good. I like the bubble at the end for some reason.
 
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