Nice job. I think you did a good job telling the story. A couple early shots of her face may not have flowed perfectly, but overall it was put together very well. your sound did a good job with mood and feeling. I watched it twice and like your edit.
I found it interesting that you labeled the vimeo clip "Experimental Student Film". It reminded me of when I was a student pilot many years ago, the instructors strongly advised us to use the phrase "student pilot" when checking on with a new air traffic controller.
I don't think you need to use that on your next project. Very nice!
