New Film: Keygen!

[WhiteWood]

This is very good. I can only encourage you to continue making films like this...they will only get better!

Some of this has been covered but my thoughts:

-The music is superb.
-The sound of the body hits during the fist fight need to be more realistic.
-The pace of the film, especially in the beginning, is very slow. This can be fixed with tighter editing. Even the opening credits had too much space between each credit. It is especially slow when the guys are deciding to shoot, etc. Tighten up all those edits.
-The "bad amateur acting" is troubling during the two girl's dialogue. Can you shorten this or get off of their faces more? The lead actress' accent is a problem. Redub the dialogue?
- I like the off-center framing. Their screen direction worked, so it is interesting.
-Tommie, the closing credits are indulgent. Combine Producer/Director and get rid of casting and location because that is what a director does as part of the job. Less is more with credits.

Keep up the good work!

GREAT CRITIQUE! Thanks alot man. I swear, this website is like... Film school Jr. lol. Couple of questions and comments though.

As for the body hits, of course they ARE metal, so if you listen closely, I had to make my OWN sound effects by combining real sound effects with the sound of me hitting the type of metal I figured these androids would be made out of.

On what scene did u like the off-center framing?

I guess on the credits. And location and casting is actually not up to the director completely. And I sometimes don't location scout on my music videos and films.