New DVX Short (2 mins)

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Cleavage2

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G'day everyone.

Finished this little short a few weeks ago, was written in a night, shot in 2-3 hours a few days later, edited over a couple of days. By no means perfect, but was a bit of fun for a university assessment.

http://truerideproductions.vc2.ca/films/holdup.htm

I rushed sound editing, some is pretty average. But hey, always a learning process.
 
Cleavage2 said:
G'day everyone.

Finished this little short a few weeks ago, was written in a night, shot in 2-3 hours a few days later, edited over a couple of days. By no means perfect, but was a bit of fun for a university assessment.

http://truerideproductions.vc2.ca/films/holdup.htm

I rushed sound editing, some is pretty average. But hey, always a learning process.
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I liked it! Loved how it switched from them talking to the speed up B&W shots through the story.
 
The image quality and and colors are good. Except for a few shots where there was a big shadow behind the actor, the lighting was really good. The framing could be better. The close-up of the cashier, after the dolly shot, has WAY too much headroom (repeated through-out the video). And two shots after that (with the two guys in frame) there's again too much headroom and the blue counter at the bottom looks odd. I liked the b&w robbing sequences. Well done. And the elevator music playing in the background is a nice touch.

Since the story is about robbery, using security camera footage would have made some nice cutaway shots. Just set the camera, up high, and record a few scenes. Then alter the footage in post (b&w with grain).

Overall it was a good short video, especially for a student film. Good job!
-pk
 
Cheers guys. Yeah my girlfriend pointed out the headroom problem, I wasn't always behind the camera framing it up cause I was always in shot. Also with the security footage thing, we were going to do that, we talked about shooting it while on set, but we just never got around to it.

Glad you guys enjoyed it.
 
I noticed the same problems already pointed out, but aside from that, I really liked it. The black and white zoom ins were very effective. Nice story and good actors. Sort of had a Guy Ritchie feel to it
 
They have Blockbusters in Australia?

http://www.blockbuster.com.au/

They sure do; greedy corporate bastards.

Opening Dolly is a little overboard; I think opening on a static shot would have worked better (probaly still edit it and cut the dolly part out) and I would have liked to have seen a few different looks on the reverses.

Merey subjectivel; other than that; I thought it kind of fun. Good job. The music was perfect; sounded totally 'retail like'. Nice exposure and levels.

Keep shooting!
 
I loved it! I did notice the headroom issue...after it was pointed out... Personally, I thought it was great!
 
Very good....headroom was my only issue, it was a tight storyline. Well captured and well lit. I thought for a moment I felt a little John Cleese influence in the acting but that could just be the accents ( though Australian, it sounds a bit English) Keep it up!
 
It was awesome! The story was good for a 90 second film. The end is very ironic. I thought that was kinda funny. Everything else was good. I liked the filiming. except...as everyone pointed out...the headroom..but besides that..it was top notch. Good work!!

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Great job telling the story in the cut... people seem to have forgotten that art and seem obsessed with steadicams, dolly shots and cranes!



ash =o)
 
oscar-jaylen, are you referring to the fact that the knife is the opposite way up when placed on Paul's head? We used a real knife, as I didn't have time to search for a realistic looking prop, so we just had to be as careful as we could.

Glad everyone is enjoying it, I didn't know it would be perceived this well :)
 
Cleavage2 said:
Thanks bvalente, was there anything particular you liked about it production wise?
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Yes - I'll tell you exactly. For all of our discussions on technique, hardware, etc. it was simply a good engaging story.

The fact that several people commented "oh, I didn't see such and so a problem" is possibly the greatest compliment to be paid - It means they were (and I was) too engaged in the story to see the minor cinematoraphy hiccups.

Kudos to you as a storyteller - As for the photography, everyone here has given really good input for you.

In my first film I really learned that generally I framed my shot too wide. Now I shoot a little closer than I think is necessary, and it seems to work fine

Brian
 
And here I was thinking the story was the weakest part of the production... Thanks for all the feedback everyone.
 
Pretty cool guys. But totally off the subject, I started watching the clip and listening to the accents and was like hey!! These guys are from Oz. Cool. I'm in Oz too(originally from US) but in Sydney now. I was thinking we need to setup an Australia DVX network of some sort. I got my DVX a couple months back and am always shooting something. Still yet to post anything though. Are you guys doing anything at the Melbourne film fest?

Any way ..good job but lets start up that Aussie network.


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CarltonD, I haven't looked into anything about the Melbourne film fest, I don't actually own a DVX unfortunately so I only get it for special occasions and also when I have the $$$ to rent or if a friend is kind enough to lend me his.

But yeah an Aussie DVX network would be sweet.
 
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