SHORT: New Comedy Short - "Horrible Roommate"

R

rightelempro

Member
Hey guys,

We are back again with another short comedy skit. Just trying to be consistent to provide you all with some entertainment. Please continue to support us.
Feel free to leave any comments or feedback. If you like it, please subscribe to our youtube channel. We are also on twitter too, the page is listed in the description.

Thank you all!!

Here is the link to the video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2nK_VTCaQHk
Link to the channel: http://www.youtube.com/user/rightelempro

Have a nice day!!

-Right Elements Production
 
I liked the concept for the piece.

Some suggestions :

Think about production design. There's nothing that can add more to production design then a cheap coat of paint. Is it possible to paint the apartment ? You can always consider it a necessary expense if you are going to be shooting multiple episodes. Another idea is to use a couple accent walls (paint) and stage around them using different colours for different episodes.

Your sound was ok, but could have been much better. I'm sure dre83 would have specific suggestions.

The music was too Romper Room for the piece. It created the wrong atmosphere.

The script could have been amped up. Think of all the outrageous yet seemingly realistic variations on Horrible Roommates. Even if you stuck with the current list you could rewrite it to get more conflict, surprise and originality. Ask for examples of horrible roommate stories from websites, friends, google it, compare and contrast to yours before shooting. As mentioned the concept you came up with is great. It just needed some work.

Think about getting some actors to portray the roommates (assuming it was your friends). While this may be just for fun; getting actors can be a valuable learning experience on any scale. Otherwise, your friends could try getting some experience in acting from a local college (for example). Gesticulating and raising your voice to connote annoyance needs to work in conjunction with real acting, not supplant it.

The directing was serviceable, and you did change the shot framing on some punchlines (nice). The only suggestion I'd have here is think about what the shot is saying and whose pov is it from when making a shot list (reframe accordingly)

Overall, great concept and I'm glad I watched it. Hopefully, my suggestions are copacetic or can be of some use.

Thanks for the entertainment. :)
 
Last edited:
ha !! I'm forced to give suggestions :p

Some of the dialogues are out of sync (move sound 2 frames to the left, literary the left). Is it because you did ADR ? Or
the sounds shifted during the edit ?

Have you used noise reduction ? If so, do it less "agressive".

The text-screen is little bit to long...

In the bathroom there's some kind of heater or cooler or other fan turning thing ? Could not be turned off ?
 
You must log in or register to reply here.
Back
Top