My Newest Film- Tin Man

By far your best work. This was really something, kept me intrigued and interested the entire time. Great camera movement, youve come a long way on that.

What was this shot on, what did you use for sound? What kinda rig?


My only complaint is the use of the fight club music at that one part, it fits, but its so instantly recognizeable, that it kinda took me out of what was happening.

Great writing, great acting and great camera work, i will comment more later, but just wanted to take a sec to give you some quick feedback.
 
I shot this on an HPX170. We have a Digital Media Center of the Arts at Yale where we are able to rent equipment for free, such as boom mic kits, i dont know what exactly the name of the mic is. The film took me three days to shoot. My biggest trouble has been able to find composers on campus, oddly enough while i was on my last day of shooting for Tin Man, i met two! so i will be using original music in my films instead of the dust brothers (fight club)etc. Jon, really appreciate the input and same with you adamrahn and if you guys have anything else to add please do so! thanks a lot...
 
I watched the first part. To be honest, it was a bit slow. Kept me from watching the second. Sorry.

The problem I think comes from the slow pacing, the slow editing, and lack of conflict within the scene. Every scene in every film should have some sort of conflict between two opposing forces. That's the reason for a scene. Story is conflict.

I'm guessing him losing his heart was symbolic in one way or another, and that was cool, but it didn't grab me enough. Cinematography is pretty good. Acting was okay.
 
Ok, let me go into a bit more detail now.

I can see what Jon Starr was saying, your pacing is a bit slow, and everything is sorta abstract and confusing at the beginning. I remember in a writing class a professor once told me to start off with a dream sequence is cliche, not sure if that applies to film or not.

Again, i would just do a bit more edits in the first half to get to the main story maybe a minute faster or so.

I liked the acting, and the story as well. Its amazing how fast your skills with the camera have progressed in the 3 films you have posted. Good job keeping sound fairly neat the entire time through (a rough task i know especially working with varied locations.

Did you do anything special with your mic setup, like always keep it a certain distance from the actors etc...? One issue i had with recording in multiple locaitons, sometimes with different mics, is that the overall sound levels would go up and down from the differnt locations, seems like you didnt hve much of this problem.

Sounds like youve already addressed the score so i wont touch on that.

The only other thing i found confusing, is that you never show a scene to explain why all the sudden he thinks he recognizes the original girl, why its not the same etc... (or if you did i didnt catch it)

How did you go about casting your actors this time around?

keep it up
 
Ah i understand the pacing, I tend to keep my longer takes in there just because i enjoy my footage. I need to cut it down, make it a little better. I didn't write the film, so the story line issues aren't really in my hands. I didn't cast the actors either, the writer did. We kind of winged it and got everyone we could to do the film considering we were filming it during finals week and decided pretty late to shoot it. So for editing purposes, i should do quicker cuts to make the story move more efficiently? anything else you might have seen? Thanks guys.

I didn't do anything particularly special with the mic set up, just got the boom, and a someone to hold it above the actors in each location. I edited all the sound levels in post so that not many things were louder than they needed to be, whether it be music or dialogue.
 
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