DOC: My Last Breath Trailer

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cydodson

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Hello all. Just posting a trailer for any critiquing, thoughts, or ideas on how to make it better. Basically haven't put this up anywhere yet to the masses. I'm about to start a kickstarter page to raise some funds, figured I would get a little feedback first from the pros. Thanks for watching!!!

Shot with EX3 and FS100 (reenactments)
 
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I found the titles a bit cheesy and that sunset needs grading, but otherwise, great job.
Interviews look very good.

Frank
 
All titles are excerpts from his book, but I see the cheese factor. I've been going back and forth on it. Sun grading noted. Thanks!
 
Maybe I expressed that wrong.

I mean the typesetting -especially "my last breath" at 0:42 would look better and more consistent in just one line, like the other titles.
Also I would start with them a bit smaller in size and than slowly zooming in - not much, joust enough that you notice they are coming at you.
 
wow, seems like a great story. I did notice the sunset as well, I thought the image was super flat. add contrast, a little saturation, and nudge the white balance towards the orange/red hue. That should make it pop. I thought the title font was wayyyyyy bigggggg. I didn't mind the type set though. maybe use a backdrop for the titles, mayabe that sunset.lol
 
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