My First Short Film

that was quite amusing, at some point I was thinking there was a black conspiracy thing behind it... lol... maybe try to pick up the pace a bit, it is a comedy, and it is funny, makes you wonder and think and laugh, so I felt the pace was a bit lagging, but overall a nice little piece. good job!
 
I think it's brilliant. Just reduce the length by editing it down and making it tighter then add some jingle like music. I think that is sorely missing. Also, you might want to consider tweaking the ending. It's wonderful for a first film.
 
Very Good!

Timings off on the final scene and it seems a bit stretched, audio needs work , but a fun ride..

No, that sounds too critical. It's a good story, well told and I liked it. Thank you.


If this is really your first I'm definitely down for more! :thumbup:
 
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Thanks for the input guys. I've done a few things since that film now. Did a short film called "Sprawl". My most recent project was a stop-motion for the Heinz Commercial Contest. I found out today we made it into the top fifteen! Now it's up to the viewers to vote.
Check it out, let me know what you think. If you like it, please vote for it. Everyone can vote once a day, everyday for two weeks (voting ends Sept. 10):
My entry is called "A Fry's Best Friend"

http://www.topthistv.com

If you REALLY like it...tell your friends and family...and get them to vote.

I welcome any comments, good or bad.

Thanks,
Chip Johnson
Engine 13 Productions
 
I liked your film. I liked how their was only a couple rooms and a hallway for your set, and a handful of actors being used, and the concept of pressing the button was amusing. The only thing I would critique on is the lack of music or noise. A soft ambient song or some background noise would have added a little more atmosphere to your flick, but nicely done otherwise.
 
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