[My First Real Short] The Hand That Feeds

[Loren Simons]

http://exposureroom.com/members/simonSaysProductions.aspx/assets/84f668b79d574a2c930f327f1541569c/

This is my new short feature that was shot entirely with the A1 and a redrock with fd lenses. I was the director of photography and editor.

Hope you enjoy it, it it twenty minutes, but i feel you wont regret it=]

Any criticism is very welcome!
This is a repost from the A1 forum but i think it would work better here.

 

[pekar1876]

Your Link

Your Link

not working or me...

 

[Ryan Patrick O'Hara]

Got nothing here, as well.

 

[iSTy]

All I got was

"HTTP Error 400.0 - Bad Request ASP.NET detected invalid characters in the URL."

 

[Loren Simons]

ahhh, sorry i messed up the url, you will also need the newest flashplayer to view =( it will hopefully be on vimeo soon though.

http://exposureroom.com/members/simonSaysProductions.aspx/assets/84f668b79d574a2c930f327f1541569c/

 

[Ryan Patrick O'Hara]

Good job, I was really interested the entire time. The pacing was nice. I know those were probably your friends, so I'm not going to talk about casting ages, but my only real suggestion is find better locations. The location at the very end is a good one (the one where clean is seeing the kid get paid).

Nice work.

 

[Loren Simons]

thank you=] and also the location in the end was used in probably 4 other scenes =]

 

[iSTy]

That was good, thank you, many lessons in there to be learnt

 

[Loren Simons]

here now is the vimeo link for anyone that the exposure room link didnt work for
http://www.vimeo.com/1598246
this is also the FINAL final version, some may have noticed the plot flaw (shh) and others may have noticed that one damn clip i forgot to flip, literally half a second, well here it is! the final version!