my first film

ok ok. first of all, that's a sweet bike, do you take it off any jumps?

the title sequence is too long

when someone is thinking about something delicious, they lick their lips, not their teeth.

don't do the "walk into camera" transition and then cut to them walking away from the same spot. actually, i would just never do the "walk into camera" thing period, but some people think its the bees knees.

noooooo the pizzas gone omgomgomgomgomg!

the loop of the shower sound is too short. google "free sound project"

anyone who reacts like the d00d in the shower deserves to die.

your mom is ****ing awesome!

way way way way way too long.


good work though, way better than my first short, that's for damn sure.
 
Mad Props on your first movie!!! I enjoyed the plot, and camera angles. I thought what you did with a handy cam is wonderful. Keep it up!
 
your film doesnt take itself too seriously, so its oddball humor works for the most part. It does need to be tightened up (less is more)
 
I make it a point never to judge content, that is far too subjective. However, when it comes to technicals, you did a great job with CC and motion to make look like film. I agree with whomever said that a couple of your angles were awkward, but those were pretty good for the most part. Your music choice was great...I am a sucker for classical. Very good for a student flick. Keep up the good work!
 
i think a director should not be also the editor, because it is very hard to let go :)

@chris grieder are you from germany?
i down´t know why, but for any reason, google-video doesn´t work in germany.
sorry, i do not have other webspace :(
 
oli said:
i think a director should not be also the editor, because it is very hard to let go :)
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I think first time directors, if they're capable, SHOULD edit their first films. There is nothing better for learning than sitting in an editing chair going "oh god, why did I do that? That's too long. I can't cut out. I wish I shot that angle...what can I do to cover it up?"

If they finish a film and have people tell them it's too long, or the pacing isn't right, then they have to think about WHY that is. A first time director/editor who thinks "this is MY vision...NO ONE ELSE MATTERS...MWAA HA HA HA" will hopefully by the end of the first rough cut have some friends who will tell them that half of it needs cutting out. The biggest lesson to learn IS letting go. Just as important in pre-production and production as it is in post.

I also think that a first time director needs to sit in with the sound guys as well while they're editing and mixing. It is THE most important part of the film.

This is in general folks...haven't seen the flick yet. Congratulations for getting into it!
 
_MR_ said:
I think first time directors, if they're capable, SHOULD edit their first films. There is nothing better for learning than sitting in an editing chair
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Thats true, I realy learned very much with the editing of this project, it was an important experiance for me.
 
It´s a highschool project but no teacher was involved so I was indie.
Actually I do not try to say anything with this project, it´s just what it is, an italien foot drama supported by selected and edited music =)

A visual and editing exercise for myself.
 
Did you work off a script or just wing it? Liked the mother in the end. Short
about 2 minutes too long, I think.

Charli
 
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