music video footage!

[aaron_wade]

so, here are some performance scenes from a video im shooting. we are shooting the rest of the storyline this wkend, so stay tuned! i wouldn't consider this a rough cut either. we still have cc work that needs to be done.

please critique me!

http://brandondickson.com/sbbmv.mov

band: www.sealedbyblood.com

 

[thartley]

Let me start off by saying that the style of music isnt my taste, so after a little bit, I turned down the speakers.

A couple of things, and its just in my own opinion, but the framing seems off. When the light above the pipe and drape, (or set curtains) come into frame, its distracting. I keep looking up there instead of watching the performers. And I am not sure if continuity was a big concern because the lead singer would have jacket on, then off, then it would be on again. If that is an intentional part of the edit, maybe dont show him actually taking the jacket off in the beginning. That way, it feeds into it appearing and disappearing with no explanation.

But maybe the words of the song would do something to help me out. You mention shooting the rest of the storyline soon. What is the storyline?