Manifest Breakfast Trailer

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OpticSugar

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Hello, so i just cut together a short teaser for my first short film. I'd like some opinions, good, bad or whatever. Does it make you want to see more? What do you get out of watching it from one viewing? Does ANY story line come across? I am trying to be somewhat ambiguous in this teaser... the story is about a man who loses his mind and the whole film depends on the build of intensity at the end so i don't want to give any of that away in the teaser. But is it interesting enough without giving any of that away?

(its a 1280x720 quicktime movie, so give it a minute to load

www.manifestbreakfast.com/trailer.mov


Thanks!
 
It's got my interest, although only because you told me it's about a man losing his mind. If not then I would have been a bit too confused by this. It doesn't really grab me, leaving me wanting more, but it strikes my interest.
 
I liked the clip but only because I know its a short film so only so much of the story can you give away :). Looks good though.
 
imthinking said:
I liked the clip but only because I know its a short film so only so much of the story can you give away :). Looks good though.
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Thanks, yea its difficult to tell what the story is about without giving away to much.

I need more feed back guys, i see 96 views but only 3 comments...lets hear it!
 
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still looking for a bit more feedback, there is a continuity error in this trailer, is it bothersome or should i live with it? please, any feedback would be nice
 
I just realized that this thread is in the wrong section. I had another thread about production for my short which was in this section but the point of this thread is for feedback only and not a production diary, is there any way it can be moved into the proper location? Sorry for my naivety and the inconvenience. (but thats what junior members are for!)


****Thread Moved to HVX screen grabs section, please remove from user films****

thanks
 
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