Looking for Feedback for my Short Film

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Denialorcoped

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I am currently directing my first short film that I also wrote, a comedy roughy 30 minutes in length. I am a one-man crew trying to make ends meet with no budget.

Here's a short montage sequence I have edited that will be in the film; the 10 seconds of blackness is for footage I haven't filmed yet.

I will appreciate any constructive criticsm; I posted on my website, I don't want it on youtube or vimeo:

http://www.coopersplanet.com/toons_movies/montage.html
 
I think thats how my parents met....

that was a fun video, cute characters, camerawork was good (a bit overexposed at times- be sure to use the waveform monitor). Was it supposed to go blank between 00:47 and 01:10?
 
The blank screen between that time is for footage we haven't film yet.

When we filmed it was incredibly sunny with no overcast so it was hard fighting the overexposure. Usually I just put the ND filter to what the camera tells me and adjust the iris a little while having my zebra setting on. I'll start using the waveform monitor too now though.

If there's a better way to fight the overexposure please share, that seems to be a re-occurring problem for me...
 
for the shot at 01:13 I would suggest stopping the background (city) down to what's safe (use waveform). That will result in much darker foreground subjects (actors)- so use a shiny board or bounce card. This will reflect some of that bright light behind them- onto their faces.

I have used cheap foamcore as a soft bounce, and a windshield sunshade as a sharp shiny board.

The shot starting at 00:28- same thing, but you would need a much bigger shinyboard as your subject moves in from wide to closer in. I don't envy you- based on the shadows, looks like you shot that around noon-ish. That is some of the hardest light to work with. If possible, plan a shot like that earlier in the morning or later in the afternoon. If you can't do that- go with the bounce cards.
 
Nice shooting.

It looks a bit over saturated to me.
Also, you should lock your exposure when you're shooting. I can see the camera making exposure changes.
 
I put the saturation up a little in colorista to match the mood of the scene more, but maybe i'll take it down a little.

How do you lock your exposure? I did use the auto iris, but I thought it only manipulated changes when the iris button was held down.
 
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