SHORT: Last few words

[rubix]

Hi guys,

This is a short Non-Fiction documentary I have just made for my second year of university. It is a very personal project to me as it deals with my family's recent loss of my grandfather. The film is from my father's perspective, as I deemed it fitting that he should have his right to say his final few words to his father.

Although it has been submitted, I feel it is still not fully completed. So any constructive criticism you guys can give me would be very much appreciated.

Thank you

 

[dre83]

First of all: black is not interesting...even with music on it... Just fade it out.

Then, I hear it's just the on camera mic that was used ? If it was boomed, it would have sound more "close" already (all handlings)
and with Foley it gives a more "being close" feeling.