Joe Mozbie - Drewb50

Hey man,

I enjoyed your flick, it held my attention and looked really good. The lead guy was pretty great too - fun to watch him go through his day. Ending worked for me as well.

Only complaint here was that I wished a bit more happened. I think the concept was there, and could've been taken much further. For example, when he was brushing his teeth, I was just waiting for them to start falling out! Little stuff like that.

All in all, really nice job and looking forward to seeing more from you.
 
I was watching the films in alphabetical order, so I had watched quite a few before yours ... I ranked yours near the top with regards to score. Good story, funny little twist. Pretty good production value.

NICE neck popping SFX, eyes rolling back in head. Once the mom said she hadn't seen him since the funeral, I could tell where this was going, but still looked forward to it.

I don't know if the newscasters were supposed to come across as real or not, but more often than not they didn't. Just about my only critique, really.
 
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I really liked the ending on this one. It was just a sudden change. I had a feeling like he was a zombie but wasnt sure because he didnt have all the make up on. Yeah the news guys were kind of wierd.
brian
 
I think the ending was a let-down after all the setup. Don't take this too much to heart, as I'm sure a lot of people will love the ending. The coffin scene just make me go 'wow'. I really thought you were going to do something interesting about the psychological effect of being undead, but then it turned into a gag.

I think you nailed the low-key setup with your quiet framing and visuals. The television actors weren't great, but they were alright most of the time (that sheriff was a bit over the top, but not enough to make me lose interest). The makeup was strange, but good enough. Some of the lines were too on the nose (wasting your.... life away). Oh, and the editing during the moaning zombie titled-camera scene was too aggressive.

Overall, I'd say you've got a good visual sense (though you're better with stillness than action), but I'd like to see you with different material. Good job, though, for a five-minute zombie film.
 
Cool idea. Shot very well. I like the closeup of him yawning right out of bed. You did a great job with the news as far as presentation, but the actors didnt have that newscaster tone to them. All the hints in the news and grandma’s phone message were a little too obvious.
 
Curugon said:
Only complaint here was that I wished a bit more happened. I think the concept was there, and could've been taken much further. For example, when he was brushing his teeth, I was just waiting for them to start falling out! Little stuff like that.
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Thanks for the comments. I did have more events written, but had to cut some. If I had to do it again, maybe I would've cut different scenes.


Envision said:
NICE neck popping SFX
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Good ol' celery!

Envision said:
I don't know if the newscasters were supposed to come across as real or not, but more often than not they didn't.
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LOL! I was the news caster.


Hectorxd said:
I really liked the ending on this one. It was just a sudden change. I had a feeling like he was a zombie but wasnt sure because he didnt have all the make up on.
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Yeah, he wasn't rotting yet, so he had just a little white on and digital selective color removal. One funny thing about that was he had a massive sun burn on the back of his neck. Thank God for color replace in Premiere, but even with that, you can still see some red.
 
wcs said:
The makeup was strange, but good enough. Some of the lines were too on the nose (wasting your.... life away). Oh, and the editing during the moaning zombie titled-camera scene was too aggressive.

Overall, I'd say you've got a good visual sense (though you're better with stillness than action), but I'd like to see you with different material. Good job, though, for a five-minute zombie film.
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The makeup was a no-budget-corn-starch-j-e-l-l-o-mixture. We had a blast putting it on. Maybe some liquid latex next time.

This was my second short and definitely not my last.


the-lyons-den.com said:
All the hints in the news and grandma’s phone message were a little too obvious.
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I've learned it's very hard to predict with a twist ending whether you're giving away too much information. I was leaning toward your opinion while editing. I originally had the movie tentatively titled "Joe Zombie", but I knew if I had any chance left at surprising anyone, that title would have to change.
 
Nice little film.

I think you are on to a solid idea...one that I could see expanded on. I feel that a little less predictability would have helped the plot along (something keeping in the spirit of "Sixth Sense")
 
CallaghanFilms said:
I feel that a little less predictability would have helped the plot along (something keeping in the spirit of "Sixth Sense")
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I agree. Maybe it would've been a little less predictable outside a "Zombiefest" of films. You think? I should test it on some people who have no pretense.
 
I thought this one looked/sounded/played very well. Maybe a bit too much MB if that's what you used. Makeup was decent also. I gave this one a better score than most. Great job w/ the camera work also.
 
I enjoyed this piece for its, for lack of a better word, simplicity. Nice story, executed well. I liked the set ups (answering machine message, etc) and thought it worked well overall. What was off a bit for me was the pacing. It was a little slow in the middle. It didn't detract from the piece too much at all, but the flow did feel off for a little bit.

Zombies were cool, but my only complaint would be why have them walk/act/look like zombies until they go to talk? All the zombie mannerisms were kind of dropped when they spoke.

Good job!

Robert
 
Slimothy said:
I thought this one looked/sounded/played very well. Maybe a bit too much MB if that's what you used. Makeup was decent also. I gave this one a better score than most. Great job w/ the camera work also.
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Thanks! Yeah, MB.


Ought2bCommitted said:
Zombies were cool, but my only complaint would be why have them walk/act/look like zombies until they go to talk? All the zombie mannerisms were kind of dropped when they spoke.
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That was intentional. I wanted them to suddenly be 'normal friends' when they spoke. Thanks for the comments.
 
This is one of the better flicks... again I'd say for sure in the top 10. This could have been better with a little more action, but I enjoyed the lead actor and the bathroom mirror cuts. I agree more could have happened in those clips, but I still really enjoyed this flick. This one is fairly high on entertainment value... even though I would have liked to see more happen the pacing was fairly good. I actually thought the newscasters were decent enough... showing the TV rather then cutting to the news (actually filling the screen) was a good choice and made the newscaster's cheesy jokes funnier.

This flick was almost perfectly executed (pun intended) and I enjoyed the overall quality of everything. Cinematography, lighting, audio, story, and the quasi-twist at the end... this is a good one. Don't miss it.
 
MattinSTL said:
This flick was almost perfectly executed (pun intended) and I enjoyed the overall quality of everything. Cinematography, lighting, audio, story, and the quasi-twist at the end... this is a good one. Don't miss it.
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Thanks! :grin:
 
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