I was hooked in at the beginning of this and really enjoyed the characters you set up. Nice story! It's probably just a preference for me but I think there's some good set ups in there to develop the conflict even more. For example when Dutch Henry arrived in town, it seemed like Jesse was being really aggressive with him. Henry appeared to be a kindly stranger just passing through and he said that he was on his way to check in the gun. I get that Jesse just didn't trust him but maybe there is room to make Henry a bit more aggressive and resistant there. I think with a few minor tweaks like that your onto something special with this one!
