Help with Scene and Sound.

Chapelgrovefilms, you don’t have to say the same thing twice. “Most agents - more specifically interns working for agents - will try to find any excuse they can to stop reading your screenplay and toss it, or just stamp rejected on it to skip out on detailed coverage.” And anyway it looks...

Capt Quirk...maybe my enjoyment and your education. Ahoy to the fleet in the bathtub.

Unk_a1, you really should go back to basics. This is not the way.

Randall_Oelerich... nice hat.
 
Djinjis:

The point is if you are going to give constructive criticism, by all means do it if your level of knowledge and skill could benefit those who know less of the subject matter. But be clear that as previously mentioned, there is no tolerance for rudeness by any means, whether it be intended as sarcastic or not. Choose your words more carefully please as I am sure you have much to give and gain from the forum, but keep the principal of respect in mind at all times.
 
I recommend you put masturbation in the script. This won't necessarily remove the word "sleep".
The guy wanna "just do it", but the malefic noise don't let him go. Because he can't
imagine Jenna the way he want, his little friend keep sleeping. So he is in agony and pain. He wake up and start writing on a movie
script. This way, you gain drama, the attention of the reader, M rating for your future movie, from the beginning, and the movie
can start with the "based on a true story" advertising. Critics award will complete it with "autobiography".
 
Randall_Oelerich said:
I needed to learn to avoid "we see", needed to learn to put sounds in lowercase; but to my defense that is what the books were telling me-- but then books are often several years outdated by the time they are published, not in sync with current hollywood standards.
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Really...lowercase "sounds" that are suppose to be heard? I guess that makes sense it doesn't distract the reader from losing concentration.

Those darn books, you think there good for ya...any other hints/tips your consultant, said of current trends, that you might want to share.:D

Thanks.
 
PaPa said:
The point is if you are going to give constructive criticism, by all means do it if your level of knowledge and skill could benefit those who know less of the subject matter. But be clear that as previously mentioned, there is no tolerance for rudeness by any means, whether it be intended as sarcastic or not. Choose your words more carefully please as I am sure you have much to give and gain from the forum, but keep the principal of respect in mind at all times.
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Agreed 100%.

Djinjis, this is not a promising start. Please adjust your attitude to fit the board, and you'll be welcome here. But to state that you understand the purpose of our board here, but (and I quote):
I understand, I just don’t care
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Well... that kind of attitude (if it continues) guarantees a very brief stay.

Let's try to start over and start off on the right foot this time, okay?
 
Trend seems to be to write scripts that allow for fast reads, and uppercase sounds distract from that; just what I have been told not only by my mentor/consultant but also by the gurus over on indietalk.com who confirmed that. Other trend I was told is to minimize use of slug lines to make the read fast, such as the OP used in his scene, where once you are in a INT. FARMHOUSE for example, you can just put BEDROOM, KITCHEN, etc. on a new slugline without the INT. and time of day, etc. All to make the read fast. Lots of whitespace of course.

A great resource on this and other current trends is John Rainey's 'Craft Notes" at his site (mythmakerjohn.com)
http://mythmakerjohn.com/craft_notes.htm


Unk_a1 said:
Really...lowercase "sounds" that are suppose to be heard? I guess that makes sense it doesn't distract the reader from losing concentration. Those darn books, you think there good for ya...any other hints/tips your consultant, said of current trends, that you might want to share.:D

Thanks.
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Randall_Oelerich said:
Trend seems to be to write scripts that allow for fast reads, and uppercase sounds distract from that; just what I have been told not only by my mentor/consultant but also by the gurus over on indietalk.com who confirmed that. Other trend I was told is to minimize use of slug lines to make the read fast, such as the OP used in his scene, where once you are in a INT. FARMHOUSE for example, you can just put BEDROOM, KITCHEN, etc. on a new slugline without the INT. and time of day, etc. All to make the read fast. Lots of whitespace of course.
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That's interesting! I hadn't heard that, but I like it. Thanks Randall.
 
Of course if the time changes significantly then KITCHEN or whatever needs to be done anew with INT. KITCHEN - NIGHT or whatever. But once a location and time has been established, sublocations can be used as abbreviated sluglines without INT/EXT or time. Now if I can just get my screenwriting software to play nice using that strategy, seems to cause issues (I use Movie Magic Screenwriter).

On the fast read issue -- on one hand it means slicing out extraneous prose that shure helped to fill up those 110 pages, (grin) but then on the other the use of lots of whitespace between shots in scenes adds to the page count. Yin and Yang I guess. :)
 
Yin and Yang in the kitchen.

"in modern days while the fashion of writing has become far too common, and should, if possible, be discouraged, the fashion of lying has almost fallen into disrepute", Oscar Wilde, The Decay of Lying: An Observation (1889)
 
Not how it sounds, but what he's whispering you, matters. Putting poetry, philosophy and psychology in the same barrel, this is wrong.
 
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